The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
Sample Response
The given pie chart shows data on the different family types that lived under the poverty line in 2002in the year 2001 in the UK. As is presented in the pie chart, sole parents and single persons without children were the highest in percentages who lived in destitute conditions in the UK in 2002.
According to the pie chart, people in the UK who lived inunder poverty were most likely to fallmostly fall into the sole-parent categoryunder sole parent category in 2002for the year 2002. This category had the highest poverty rateThis was the highest among all the given categories (26%more than 25%) in 2002that lived in paucity for the given year. The second-largest group living in poverty wasThe second largest segment who were needy were the single people without childrensingle persons without any child and its poverty rate was 24%their percentage was 24%. Families headed by couples with childrenCouples with children family type had a poverty rate of 15%had 15% poverty rate while this percentage was less than 10% for single aged personsperson, aged couplescouple and couples withoutwith children.
In 2002,In this year 14% of all UK householdsall household of the UK were living in poverty. Interestingly aged people had less percentage of poverty and couples with children enjoyed better economic condition than the couples without children.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is clearly organised and successfully identifies sole parents and single adults without children as the groups with the highest poverty rates. Coverage is weakened by the opening reference to 2001, the omission of the 9% couple-without-children figure, and the final comparison, which reverses the relationship between couples with and without children. Check every category label once and use the exact percentages before making comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and several correct figures, but it misstates the year, omits one category's value, and makes an inaccurate final comparison.
Report all seven labels accurately, including couples without children at 9%, and compare that figure correctly with couples with children at 15%.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are logically sequenced from an overview to category details and broader comparisons, with clear paragraphing and generally effective linking.
Avoid repeating or mislabelling a category within the same comparison so that the detailed grouping remains easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range, but expressions such as lived in paucity, highest in percentages, and less percentage are unnatural or imprecise.
Prefer precise chart phrases such as poverty rate, accounted for, and a lower proportion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are used, but recurring errors with agreement, articles, noun phrases, and tense limit control.
Check plural agreement and noun phrases, for example all households were and the sole-parent category.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
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