The Pie Charts Below Show the Percentage of Housing Owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007.
Sample Response
The given Pie Charts depict the percentage of accommodation in terms of owned and rented in Great Britain in the two specific years:1991 and 2007.
In 1991, home ownership accounted for a higher proportion than any other type of accommodationowned homes were obtained highest proportion than any other types of accommodation, with about three-fifths (60%)just over a half(55%). In 2007And In 2007, the trend was similar for owned homes, which constituted a significant proportion just below three-quarters(70%). In contrast, the proportionrate of social housing in 1991 was about 6%only 10 %; however, it decreasedit was decreased in 2007 to about 2%by a tiny fraction (5%).
Interestingly, the rate of privately rented homesprivate renting homes was similar in both yearsboth the years, which constituted roughly 11 percent15 percentage. In 1991, the percentage of socially rented homesSocial renting home was the second-largest category after home ownershipsecond highest after the homeowner, at about 23%which was 25%, whilst in the year of 2007, the proportion fell by about six percentage points to 17%the numbers decreased slightly by 10%.
Overall, it can be seenOverall, It can say that the number of homes increasednumber of houses was increased from 22 million in 19911999 to 27 million in 2007. In the UK, home ownership was the largest categoryIn the UK number of house owners was high in both the given years. But, inhabitants were not preferred to live in social houses.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response reports the dominant rise in home ownership and several other figures, and its category-by-category comparisons are generally easy to follow. The main limitation is unreliable accuracy: private renting is misreported, the first year is mistyped, and the final claim about residents' preferences is unsupported. Check each category and year carefully, then present a factual overview of the principal shifts.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main ownership trend and several values are covered, but inaccurate private-renting data, a wrong year, and an unsupported interpretation weaken achievement.
Verify all four categories against both charts and replace the claim about residents' preferences with a precise summary of the numerical changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a generally clear introduction-detail-overview structure, although some comparisons are loosely connected and the overview arrives only at the end.
Place the overview immediately after the introduction and group declining rental categories together to create a clearer progression.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but recurring collocation and word-form errors reduce precision and naturalness.
Use standard expressions such as accounted for, percentage, total number of homes, and fell by ten percentage points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, comparison structures, passive forms, and punctuation reduce control.
Check every clause for a clear subject and verb, then correct article use and avoid unnecessary passive constructions such as was increased.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Pie Charts Below Show the Percentage of Housing Owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007.
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