The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Sample Response
The bar chart shows the gender distribution of teachers teaching in six different educational settingslevels of education in the UKEngland in 2010.
In two of six grades, primary and pre-school, females much further outnumbered males as teachers. The pattern was slightly differentThere was slightly different in secondary school level, in which the number of female teachers was still higherwomen teacher’s number were still dominant. The percentage of the college teachers, both women and men, were equal. Male teachers formed the majorityMales won in the private training instituteprivate training institute, at just under 60%by over 50%. There was a large gender gap at university levela sharp gap in the university where the number of male teachers was higher than that of female teachershigher than females, with male and female teachers accounting for 70% and 30%, respectively70% male teachers against 30% female teachers. Overall, the graph shows that in the UK, female teachers predominatedfemale teachers were famous in teaching from nursery/pre-school to secondary schoolfrom toddlers to secondary school. Meanwhile, male teachers accounted for the highest percentagesmale teachers were the highest percentage at university and in private training institutesin teaching in the university and private training. At college levelIn the college level, equal proportionssame numbers of male and female teachers were teaching in 2010 in the UK. The presented data depicts that male teachers mostly taught in higher level while more female teachers were teaching on the primary level.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main gender pattern across the educational settings and includes several useful comparisons, with the equal college split and university figures reported accurately. Its main limitation is insufficient precise coverage of the chart, alongside awkward language that sometimes blurs comparisons. Prioritise a distinct overview followed by grouped, data-supported comparisons of all six settings, using accurate comparative grammar and natural terms for proportions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a relevant overview and several key comparisons, but gives little precise data for the lower educational levels and describes some features vaguely.
Support the overview with selected figures for nursery, primary, and secondary education and state the private-training comparison precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information generally progresses from lower to higher educational settings, although nearly all details and the overview are compressed into one long paragraph.
Separate the overview from two logically grouped detail paragraphs and reduce repeated concluding statements.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe proportions and contrasts, but choices such as 'won,' 'famous,' and 'grades' are inaccurate or unnatural in this context.
Use precise chart language such as 'accounted for,' 'predominated,' 'educational settings,' and 'proportion.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains understandable, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, possessives, and comparative structures reduce grammatical control.
Check subject-verb agreement and practise accurate patterns such as 'the proportion of women was higher than that of men.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
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