The bar chart illustrates the number of people in the UK eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of peoplestatistics concerning individuals in the UK consuming more than 5 portions5 or more portions of vegetables and fish per day from 2011 to 2017. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that percentages for women, children and men all rose over the period and women had the highest percentagenumbers throughout. The increase for children, comparatively, was modest.
Women began the period with 20% consuming more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish a day and this figure was stable until 2013 when it began to rise sharplyprecipitously to reachto eventually reach a high of 36% in 2016, before a fall to 30% to end the period. The percentage for menThe numbers for males finished slightly lower at 26%; however,26%, however their growth was steadier, rising in each year exceptbesides 2016 from a starting point of 16% in 2011.
The figures for children were much lower initiallymuch lower to begin (10%), before rising sharply to 14%preceding a relative surge to 14% the next year. Percentages then fluctuated around 14% and finished at a peak of 15% by the end of the period.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a concise, well-selected account with a precise overview and accurate comparisons across all three groups. The main limitation is occasional imprecision in wording, such as using 'numbers' for percentages and slightly overstating the pace of change with 'precipitously.' Prioritise consistently precise statistical nouns and neutral trend language to make an already strong report more exact.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and accurately selects the main values, rankings, and changes for all three groups.
Refine the account further by describing the 2016 dip for men and children with consistently exact percentage terminology.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report is concise, logically grouped, and easy to follow, with effective progression from the overview to detailed comparisons.
Keep comparison wording tightly attached to its referent, especially when shifting from women to men within one paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible and precise overall, with only occasional overstatement or loose statistical wording.
Replace 'numbers' with 'percentages' and use a more measured verb than 'rise precipitously' for the gradual multi-year increase.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used accurately and fluently, with only minor awkwardness that does not affect clarity.
Polish compressed phrases such as 'before a fall to 30% to end the period' into smoother, fully explicit clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart illustrates the number of people in the UK eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day.
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