The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
Sample Response
The flow chart depicts the steps involved in getting admitted toin a university byfor high school graduates. Overall, to get admitted to the university someone must have a high school degree and finally, the Dean of the university approves the admission. In detailGetting back to details, high school graduates first need to download the application form from the university website and then fill it inup. The filled application forms are then sent to the admin. The admin department either accepts an application or declines it. The two acceptance outcomes areThere are two types of acceptance – complete enrolment and provisional acceptance. Those who have been provisionally accepted need to submit additional documentationsubmit more documentations within two2 weeks to the admin department. Their documentationpapers are then reexamined. Those who are granted complete enrolmentaccepted for complete enrolment then select their a subjectpreferred subjects and register with the dean of the university. In the final stepAt the last step, the students enterthe students get admitted to the university. By contrastOn the contrary, applicants who are rejected are either given the chance to apply for an alternative course and go through the application process againsame steps again or their applications are cancelleddiscarded.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear, logically sequenced account of the main admission route and covers the provisional-acceptance and rejection branches with generally accurate process vocabulary. Its main limitation is a slightly imprecise overview, particularly the claim that the dean approves admission, while a few awkward collocations reduce polish. Prioritise an overview that accurately summarises the branching outcomes and final entry stage, then refine article, preposition, and count-noun choices.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main route and both alternative branches are covered accurately, but the overview misstates the dean's role as approving admission.
Summarise the process as an administrative decision leading to resubmission, cancellation, or enrolment, with successful applicants ultimately entering university.
Coherence and Cohesion
The stages progress logically and the branching outcomes remain easy to follow, although some transitions are slightly mechanical.
Group the main enrolment route and the provisional or rejection loops into separate paragraphs with more precise linking.
Lexical Resource
A good range of process vocabulary conveys the stages clearly, despite awkward choices such as "more documentations" and "getting admitted in."
Use natural process collocations and accurate countability, such as "additional documentation" and "admitted to a university."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is generally controlled, with occasional article, preposition, and noun-form errors.
Proofread articles, dependent prepositions, and uncountable nouns while retaining the effective complex sentence structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
Your response
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