The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
Sample Response
The table presents the number of registered vehicles in Australia for different vehicle types between 2010 and 2014 and the overall percentage changegrowth. Overall, the figures for all vehicle types increased, with passenger vehicles accounting for by far the largest vehicle categorythe majority of all vehicles in all years. Additionally, the largest percentage increase was recorded forthe biggest growth could be seen in the number of registered motorcycles. In 2010, the number of registered passenger vehicles was 11 million, while the corresponding figures for commercial vehicles and motorcycles werecompared to commercial vehicles and motorcycles, at 2.3 million and 570,000 respectivelyrespectively(1). By 2014, the number of passenger vehicles rose by 18.2%rose 18.2% to reach 13 million, while the number of commercial vehicles rose by 17.4% to reach 2.7 million2.7 million (2). Meanwhile, the number of registered motorcycles recorded the largest percentage increasesaw the biggest growth, at 30.7%, rising from 570,000 to 745,000. The figures for light and heavy trucks also increased over the period shownover the measured period, with heavy trucks rising 10.2%, from 384,000 to 423,000, and light trucks rising 23.5%, from 106,000 to 131,000.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately selects the dominant category, fastest growth, and relevant start-to-end figures, while its language is generally precise and well controlled. Its main limitation is that it completely omits the 2012 data and presents all information in one block; the priority is to add one or two meaningful mid-period comparisons and separate the overview from the detailed figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate figures cover the main categories, rankings, and growth rates, although the 2012 data are omitted.
Add a selective comparison using the 2012 figures to show how the categories developed during the period.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from the overview to grouped details, but the entire response is presented as one paragraph.
Separate the introduction and overview from the detailed comparisons to make the structure more immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary for describing quantities and change is accurate and appropriately varied, with only some repetition of vehicles, figures, and rose.
Use a few more precise alternatives for repeated change language while preserving the response's strong accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used with high accuracy, and the few minor lapses do not impede meaning.
Polish change expressions by using forms such as rose by 18.2% consistently.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
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