The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hour’s males and females worked at home for the year 2019.
Sample Response
The bar chart outlines the proportion of working hours of males and females and the three primary reasons for working at home in the year 2019.
Overall, it is evident that the main reason for working from homepurpose of work from home was to save money for both genders.both genders.’
The primary reason for workingwork from home was to save money for both gendersirrespective of both genders; however, the figure for malesproportion of males was 45 percent compared withas compared to 42 percent for femalesfemales of 42vpercentage. For greater productivityFor more productiveness, 24 percentpercentage of men chose to work from homedid more job at home whereas the corresponding figure for women was less than half as highthis rate is less than half in case of women at only 11 percentwhich was only 11 percentage.
By contrast, 26However, 26 percent of females cited easier childcare as a reason for working from homeworked at home for easier childcare , more than six times the ratewhich was more than 6times the rate of their male counterparts; thus,male counterparts thus, men accounted for onlymales only devoted 4 percent4percentage.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the dominant reason and reports all six percentages, with useful male-female comparisons. However, it is below the required length, its opening inaccurately refers to working hours, and frequent word-form, spacing, and grammatical errors weaken precision. Expand the report with a more accurate introduction and clearer comparisons, then proofread percentage expressions and sentence boundaries carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear main-feature overview and covers every category accurately, but it is under length and the introduction misidentifies the chart as showing working hours.
Paraphrase the visual accurately and develop the contrasting gender patterns, especially the much larger female figure for childcare.
Coherence and Cohesion
The short report has a clear introduction, overview, and logical category sequence, though however is overused and the final comparison is joined awkwardly.
Group the savings and productivity comparisons together, then present childcare in a separate, correctly linked sentence.
Lexical Resource
Some appropriate comparative vocabulary is attempted, but frequent errors such as productiveness, did more job, and 24 percentage make expression imprecise.
Use standard combinations such as greater productivity, worked from home, and 24 percent, and proofread all labels and figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex comparison structures, but errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, punctuation, and percentage forms occur frequently.
Build comparisons with controlled patterns such as 24% of men compared with 11% of women and separate the final clause into a new sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hour’s males and females worked at home for the year 2019.
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