You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: - describe the situation - explain your problems and why it is difficult to work - say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attentionattention about the problems I am experiencingfacing with my shared accommodation. I am a research student living along with a roommate who is an enthusiastic pianist and who seems to be quite famous, as a lot of people frequently come and visit him, to learn from him. I am troubled by the noisenoises they make and it is becoming difficulthard for me to concentrate on my research workresearch and work. I am not against musicians, but I simply prefer to have my own privacy. In additionIn addition to this, we both have a shared washroom. Since we both have to leave for workour respective works at the same time, it is sometimes hard for both of us to find the washroom availableget the washroom unoccupied. I am a person who prefersprefer to live alonelive a life of solitude. ThereforeSo, I would really appreciate it ifwould really appreciate if you couldcan provide me a single room with an attached washroomwith attached washroom to it. I hope you will considerHope you will consider my request. Yours sincerelySincerely, Suresh Panduga.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter covers every requested point, gives concrete reasons why the shared room disrupts study, and makes the preferred solution clear in a suitably respectful tone. Its main limitation is recurring awkward phrasing and grammatical control in otherwise ambitious sentences; the highest-priority improvement is to revise collocations and agreement so the request sounds consistently natural and professional.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The situation, its effects on work, and the desired single room with a private washroom are all clearly explained in an appropriate formal register.
Make the request more actionable by stating when the room change is needed and asking about the next administrative step.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a clear sequence from the noisy roommate to the shared-washroom problem and then the accommodation request.
Divide the response into purpose, problem, and request paragraphs so each stage of the message is more distinct.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to describe the accommodation problems precisely, although several collocations sound unnatural or overformal.
Replace phrases such as "bring to your attention about" and "get the washroom unoccupied" with concise, idiomatic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses several complex structures successfully, but agreement, article, and conditional errors recur across the letter.
Proofread subject-verb agreement and polite request forms, especially "a person who prefers" and "I would appreciate it if you could."
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:
- describe the situation
- explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
- say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Your response
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