You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Sample Response
Dear Marcus, I hope you and your familyHope you and your family are doing great. I have beengot admitted to Queen Mary Universityto the Queen Mary University of London for my MSc in Accounting and Finance. This is a full-time course and hopefully, I will fly to London next month. To help pay my tuition feessupport my tuition fee and get some work experience, I am planning to findget a part-time job and I am hoping that you can help me find a suitable one. My courseclass will begin on 2nd November and I will arrive in the UK on 24th October. I want to pursue a career in the financial servicesservice industry in my home country and hope to benefit fromwant to take advantage of the contemporary and specialised approach to accountancy and finance that this course offers. The worlds of accountancy and finance continually evolve as the legal framework changesare always changing due to the changing legal framework the financial sector operates in. This is why I have decided to enrol in this course. I plan to complete it on schedulefinish it on time and learn as much as possible. To help cover my tuition fees and gain work experienceTo assist in covering my tuition fee and get some job experience, I intend to takedo a part-time job, specifically in an accounting firm. Hope my BScBsc in Accounting would be relevant to such workwould be helpful for that. I hardly know anyone in the UK except you and I know that you have a wide social network in London that you can use to help me find a jobmanage a job for me. I have emailed my CV to youforwarded my Curriculum Vitae to your email and I hope you can help me find a part-time jobI am expecting that you can manage a part-time job before I arrive in London. I would be gratefulindebted for your support. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Take care and stay fine. Best wishes, Stacy
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully explains the course, financial and career reasons for seeking work, and the friend's potential help, using detailed and relevant information. Its main limitations are one-block presentation and an overly demanding request that the friend secure a job before arrival, alongside several unnatural collocations. The highest priority is to organise the three purposes into paragraphs and frame the requested assistance more realistically and courteously.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All bullet points are clearly developed and the friendly purpose is sustained, though the final expectation places unreasonable responsibility on the friend.
Ask Marcus to share vacancies, review the CV, or introduce relevant contacts rather than expecting him to arrange a job.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through study plans, reasons for working, and requested help, but the single paragraph weakens grouping.
Use separate paragraphs for the course, motivation for employment, and practical assistance requested.
Lexical Resource
A good range of study, finance, and employment vocabulary is used, with several awkward collocations and some repetition.
Use admitted to, tuition fees, financial services, obtain work experience, and help me find a job naturally and consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are generally well controlled, though article, infinitive, and agreement errors remain noticeable.
Correct forms such as admitted to university, to support my fees and gain experience, and my classes will begin.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:
- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job
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