You are going on holiday and would like to stay in the same hotel as you did on your last visit. Write to the hotel. In your letter: - Explain why you have chosen to visit the same hotel? - Give them the details of your stay? - Ask them about any events in the area during your stay.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Ankitha, a software engineer from Chennai. I plan to take a trip to Kashmir with my companions, and I would like to stay at Le Meridian hotel.
Last year, I stayed at your hotellodge when I came to Kashmir for the first time with my family. We were quite impressed by the hospitality of your employees. The complimentary breakfast had a diverse range of international recipes with a pinch of Indian flavours that was absolutely scrumptious. The rooms were luxurious and comfortable, and they hadluxurious, convenient and had spectacular views of the mountainsviews of mountains. Furthermore, we were captivated by the amenities provided, such as the gym, swimming pool and yoga centre inside the hotel, free of cost. Overall, it was a fantastic stay at your place.
For my upcoming visitMoreover, I would like to reserve three rooms for five days. We will arrive at Srinagar Airportreach Srinagar airport by 11 AM, check in around 1 PM on June 25, and check out on June 30. I would be highly obliged if you could provide a group discountsome discounts since we are a group of 6 people.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter is easy to follow and uses varied, generally accurate language to explain the return visit and provide detailed booking information. However, it entirely omits the requested enquiry about events in the area and ends without a closing request or sign-off, so the communicative task is incomplete. The essential improvement is to add a polite events enquiry and a conventional closing paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The reasons for returning and the stay details are well developed, but the required question about local events is completely missing.
Add a direct, polite request for information about events during June 25 to June 30 and finish the letter conventionally.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses clearly from the purpose to reasons and booking details, with effective paragraphing and linking.
Add a final paragraph for the events enquiry and closing request so the letter reaches a complete conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and often vivid, though a few choices such as recipes, convenient rooms, and highly obliged are slightly unnatural.
Prefer natural hotel collocations such as dishes, comfortable rooms, and I would appreciate it if.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter uses a good range of complex sentences with generally accurate grammar and only occasional awkward constructions.
Refine article and modifier use in phrases such as views of the mountains and amenities available free of charge.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on holiday and would like to stay in the same hotel as you did on your last visit. Write to the hotel. In your letter:
- Explain why you have chosen to visit the same hotel?
- Give them the details of your stay?
- Ask them about any events in the area during your stay.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.