You want to sell your mobile phone. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Explain why you are selling the phone - Describe the phone - Suggest a mode of payment to your friend
Sample Response
Dear Hamaad,Hamaad!I hope you are doing really well and in very good healthhaving a very good health. I too, feeling good and happy. Actually,I want to inform you that recently I made a decision to sell my cellphone and once you mentioned that you are interested in purchasing it, that's why I thought that I should ask you if you are willing to buy it. If you decide to buy itIf are going to purchase it, it would suit you wellit will be better for you because it is really useful and equipped with useful featuresunique in its features. Moreover,as you mentionedas you were telling that you need to work onlineyou have to do online work on youryou phone it would be very useful for youthen it will be really helpful for you.As for payment, youFurthermore,You can pay me in monthly installments, or by another method that suits youin installments or in any way which you find better.I look forward to hearing from youI am waiting for your reply. Please let me know as soon as possible, inform me as soon as possible if you are willing to buy it.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The letter establishes a friendly purpose and offers a workable payment option, but it never explains why the phone is being sold and gives almost no concrete description of the device. Frequent sentence-structure and punctuation errors also weaken clarity, while the response is slightly under length. Prioritise covering every bullet with specific details—especially the reason for selling and key phone features—then proofread complete sentences and spacing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and instalments are suggested, but the reason for selling is omitted and the phone description remains vague.
Add a specific reason for the sale and describe concrete features, condition, and value of the phone.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message follows a broadly understandable sequence, but it is presented as one block and its connectors are mechanical.
Separate the opening, phone details, payment arrangement, and closing into clear stages with accurate punctuation.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary communicates the basic offer, though it is repetitive and includes several awkward or imprecise combinations.
Use specific phone vocabulary and natural phrases for its condition, features, usefulness, and payment terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence construction, articles, pronouns, capitalization, and punctuation weaken control, although the main meaning remains accessible.
Proofread for complete clauses, correct subjects and verb forms, and spaces after punctuation before adding complex structures.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You want to sell your mobile phone. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you are selling the phone
- Describe the phone
- Suggest a mode of payment to your friend
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