You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter: - ask for information about the seminar dates - ask for details of the programme - ask about accommodation - ask about the cost
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is John Muller and I have recently seennoticed an advertisement in a local newspaper regarding a seminar on labour lawsseminar on Labour Laws that you are going to organise in Dubai. I, being an HR professional from Vietnam, would like to participate in this seminar to enhance my knowledge. I am writing this letter to seek further information about the seminarinformation regarding this. As this seminar will be held in Dubai, I would like to ask for the exact dates and schedulethe exact schedule as I have to apply for leave from work accordinglyapply for a leave accordingly from my work. Furthermore, I would like to know about the content of the program and what aspects of labour laws will be covered in the seminar. Moreover, could you please inform meMoreover, inform me of the registration fee and whether I can register online. As I will be travelling from Vietnam and do not know anyone in Dubai, I would like to ask whether you will arrange the accommodation for the participants or not. How much the accommodation, transportation and meals might cost? I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, John Muller
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Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter clearly establishes its purpose and gives relevant, specific questions about every requested aspect of the seminar, while maintaining an appropriately formal tone. The main limitation is that the response is presented as one dense paragraph and relies on somewhat mechanical transitions, with a few awkward grammatical choices. Prioritise clear paragraphing and more natural question structures to make the request smoother and easier to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is explicit, every bullet point is fully covered, and the questions are supported by relevant personal context in an appropriate register.
Refine the occasional abrupt request, such as 'inform me', so the consistently courteous tone is sustained throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from the seminar schedule and programme to fees and accommodation, although mechanical linking and absent paragraph breaks reduce fluency.
Group the requests into two or three clear paragraphs and rely less on formulaic connectors such as 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover'.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficiently broad and topic-appropriate vocabulary, with generally effective formal expressions despite a few imprecise collocations.
Use more idiomatic combinations, such as 'take leave from work' rather than 'apply for a leave from my work'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are mostly well controlled, but isolated errors occur in article use and the formation of the final cost question.
Correct question structure, for example by writing 'How much might accommodation, transportation and meals cost?'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter:
- ask for information about the seminar dates
- ask for details of the programme
- ask about accommodation
- ask about the cost
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