Action movies with spectacular car chases are very popular with young people. it is often said that these sorts of movies lead to an increase in car accidents among young drivers as they try to copy what they have seen in the films. Do you agree that such movies increase the amount of bad driving? What can be done to encourage young people to drive more safely?
Sample Response
Movies tend to have a very large influence on young people who are influenced both by what they see and hear. For this reasonBecause this is the case, it is true that car chases in action movies tend to lead to an increase in the number of car accidents among young drivers because they try to copy what they have seen in the films. They drive too fast and take unnecessary risks and the difficulty is that most young people lack the skills and experience to do this.
There are a variety of ways in which young people can be encouraged to practise safer driving habits. Firstly, the governmentGovernment should launch a safe driving campaign to convey the fact that driving safely is socially acceptablenot uncool. In effect, it should be cool to stay alive and healthy! Secondly, every movie should make it clear that dangerous car chases are performed under strict safety conditionsundertaken only in strict safety conditions with experienced drivers, and often special filmmaking techniquesmovie-making tricks are used to enhance the action. Thirdly, young people should be forced to take safe driving courses every year for the first five years after obtaining their driver’s licencethe first five years that they have their driver’s licence. In this way, they are forced to improveperfect their driving skills or their licence will be taken away.
Finally, as part of this course, young drivers should go to hospitals and witness the effects of poor or dangerous driving on other people. When they see hospitalised people whose lives have been destroyed due to reckless drivingstupid risk-taking, they will may reconsidersurely change their minds about whether it is cool to copy action heroes and drive fast.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response directly answers both questions, maintains a clear position, and develops a strong set of practical safety measures in a logical sequence. The explanation of how action films cause unsafe driving is comparatively brief, and some wording is repetitive or slightly informal. The highest-priority improvement is to deepen the causal argument with a more specific explanation or example while preserving the essay's clear organisation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts are answered directly, with a clear agreement position and several relevant, well-explained measures for safer driving.
Develop the first part further by explaining more precisely how imitation translates into particular unsafe behaviours or accidents.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses clearly from the position to proposed measures, and paragraphing and sequencing make the argument easy to follow.
Reduce reliance on numbered transitions by linking the proposed measures through their distinct purposes and likely effects.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective language for risk, regulation, and consequences despite some repetition and informality.
Replace repeated words such as 'influenced' and 'forced' and avoid conversational phrasing such as 'not uncool.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex sentences is used with strong control, and errors are rare and do not impede communication.
Refine punctuation and clause length in the densest sentences to make already accurate structures more concise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Action movies with spectacular car chases are very popular with young people. it is often said that these sorts of movies lead to an increase in car accidents among young drivers as they try to copy what they have seen in the films. Do you agree that such movies increase the amount of bad driving? What can be done to encourage young people to drive more safely?
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