Some people think that it is acceptable for using animals for the benefit of human beings. However, others believe that it is wrong to do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
For centuries, animals have been used by humans for various purposes, from providing food and clothing to being used in medical research. This fact has become a source of debate between people who support this action andthis action, and those who are against it. Before forming an opinion, it will be necessary to examine both sides.
On the one hand, it is believed that it is wrong for people to use animals for their own benefituse animals to their benefit. Supporters of this view point out that animals often experience inhumane treatment to produce food for humans. For instance, many industrial scale poultry farms subject their animals to cramped conditions from birth until they are sentfrom birth until these animals are sent to the slaughterhouse. Additionally, it is not necessary to exploit animals for gain, according to these advocates. NutrientsNutritions from meatanimal meat, such as protein, can be acquired from a vegetarian diet, whereas alternatives, including cell cultures, exist for medical research so that live animals need not be used in experimentsdo not have to be experimented on.
On the other hand, some people argue that using animals for human benefitutilizing animals for benefit is completely acceptable. A reason for this view is that animals, despite being sentient, are still largely controlled by their instincts. Owing to this lack of higher mental capacity, they probably do not deserve the same rights as humansthe same rights that humans have. Furthermore, there are human needs that cannot be fulfilled without making use of animals. For instance, as there are so many people on Earth, it is impossible not to use animals for sustenance. If animals were to disappear overnight, billions would die of starvation.
In my opinion, while it is understandable that animals should live free from human exploitation, it is not wrong to use animals for humans’ gain. Nevertheless, mankind should attempt to develop as many alternatives to help animals avoid needless suffering as possible, but without harming humans’ own development as a species.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response discusses both positions in a balanced, well-organised way and gives a clear, qualified opinion supported by relevant examples. Its main limitation is that some claims, particularly about animals' mental capacity and global food needs, are asserted too broadly; develop these points with more precise reasoning and refine a few awkward word choices to make an already strong argument more nuanced.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are directly addressed, the writer's opinion is clear, and the main ideas are well developed with relevant examples.
Qualify the broad claims about animal cognition and mass starvation with more measured reasoning or specific support.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two balanced discussion paragraphs, and a concise opinion-led conclusion.
Strengthen the transition into the final opinion by explicitly synthesising the strongest point from each preceding view.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a wide and generally precise vocabulary, though a few forms and collocations such as Nutritions and utilizing animals for benefit are inaccurate.
Refine noun forms and collocations, using expressions such as nutrients and using animals for human benefit.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, with only occasional minor punctuation or phrasing lapses.
Polish sentence boundaries and parallel structures so that the few remaining slips do not interrupt otherwise strong grammatical control.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that it is acceptable for using animals for the benefit of human beings. However, others believe that it is wrong to do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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