Australia urges Indonesia not to execute drug smugglers on death row. State your position and give the relevant reasons on how far you agree/ disagree with this.
Sample Response
Indonesia intends to execute some drug smugglers on capital punishment but Australia wants it to be cancelled. In my opinion, since Indonesia is an independent country and the capital punishment is supported by Indonesian law, it should be done without any hesitationhesitations despite the objection fromof another country.
My primary consideration for Indonesia to reject Australia’s demand is that Indonesia is a well independent country that should not base its actions on any other country’s opinion whether they are friendly countries or not. All the actions of the Indonesian governmentactivities of Indonesian Government must be done in the name of freedom and the welfarefreedom and goodness of its citizens. For exampleits citizens, for example, if executingexecute drug smugglersthe drug smuggler under a death sentenceon the death sentence is considered beneficial for the Indonesian people, then it should be performed without any reluctancereluctances.
The second reasonThe second reason I want to state is that capital punishmentthat the capital punishment is supported by Indonesian law. So the execution of drug smugglersnarcotic carriers in Indonesia is a legal action, and cancelling itthe cancellation of it can be perceived as breakingbroken the law. As an old saying goes,As an old wisdom says; “everything has its price”, the smugglers already knew that taking narcotics into Indonesia is illegal and they can be sentenced to death because of it, but they still did it, which meansdid it which means that they are ready to pay for it with their livespay it with their lives. In conclusion, I would like to emphasise that execute narcotic smugglers on death row is really Indonesia’s right and supported by Indonesian law, so Australia or any other country of the world has nothing to with it.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response states a firm position immediately and organizes two relevant supporting reasons in a clear sequence. Its main limitation is that the reasoning is asserted more than critically developed, while recurring awkward grammar and collocation reduce control. The highest priority is to explain why sovereignty and domestic law justify the policy, addressing a possible counterargument through clearer, more accurately constructed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and two relevant reasons are presented, but both rely on assertion and receive limited critical development.
Extend each reason by explaining why it outweighs humanitarian or diplomatic objections and support that explanation with a precise example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from the position to two supporting points, though some long sentences weaken the flow of ideas.
Separate supporting explanations into shorter sentences and use cohesive devices to show cause, contrast, and consequence more precisely.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic vocabulary, but frequent awkward or inaccurate expressions such as well independent and broken the law limit precision.
Use established legal and diplomatic collocations, including fully independent, violate the law, and sentenced to death.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring errors in verb patterns, articles, agreement, and punctuation reduce accuracy.
Review gerund and infinitive structures after expressions such as considered and emphasise, and divide run-on sentences correctly.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Australia urges Indonesia not to execute drug smugglers on death row. State your position and give the relevant reasons on how far you agree/ disagree with this.
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