Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?
Sample Response
Many people think that modern children have an abundance of free time and doing more school work in their free time is necessary. As parents, being concerned about children's grades and studies is natural but overpressuring them to study and get top grades might backfire. Children's leisure activitiesactivity should be fun andyet interesting which will eventually teach them important lessons and make them more creative. Schoolwork is definitely important. But if children are forced to study all day long without having enough time for recreation or refreshment, it will increase their stress levelslevel and negatively affect their physical and cognitive development later in their livesin later stages of their lives. I believeI believe, free time means a child should be allowed to do things that are outside their normal routinethings that our of their normal routine. For children, it can be playing sports in a playground or parkin the playground or a park with other children their ageother kids of their age. This will teach them how to be a team player and enhance their social skills. They can also play educationaleducative video games for a few minutes and watch cartoon shows. Besides, practising a hobby is another valuable optionpractising a hobby sounds impressive to me. To support thisFor this, a family should be open-minded and try to find the hidden talents of their offspringoffsprings. I believe that not all children are born with particular talents. It is our duty as parents, teachers and relatives who motivate them and engaging them in extracurricular activities such as drawing, dancing, singing etc are also necessary. We have to understand that an socially isolated adolescentunsocial adolescent with good academic grades cannot havemake much impact on our society and cannot achieve professional successclimb the professional success. In conclusion, even though studying and preparing for exams is very important for the future of a child, we should not force them to remain occupied with schoolworkenforce them to be occupied with it all the time. Instead, various social, fun and creative activities in free time will make them bettermore prepared for the future.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, relevant view of how children should use leisure time and supports it with several sensible activities and benefits. Its main limitation is that the ideas are delivered in one long block and are sometimes weakened by awkward wording and faulty sentence construction. The highest priority is to organise the argument into distinct paragraphs and edit each sentence for grammatical completeness and natural collocation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question directly, maintains a clear position, and develops several relevant ways children can use their free time.
Develop one or two activities more deeply with precise explanations instead of briefly listing several options.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas generally progress logically and linking expressions clarify relationships, but the absence of paragraphing makes the argument feel compressed.
Divide the response into purposeful paragraphs that separate the position, supporting reasons, examples, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied vocabulary for education, recreation, development, and social skills, though several word choices and collocations are unnatural.
Replace awkward expressions with established combinations such as educational games, discover talents, and achieve professional success.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures communicates the argument, but recurring agreement, clause, and sentence-construction errors reduce control.
Proofread complex sentences for complete clause structure, correct verb forms, and clear links between subjects and predicates.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?
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