Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some hobbies are relatively easy, while others are more challengingpresent more of a challenge. Personally, I believe that both types of hobby can be fun, and I therefore disagree with the statement that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyablein order to be enjoyable.
On the one hand, many people enjoy easy hobbies. One example of an activity that is easy for most people is swimming. This hobby requires very little equipment, it is simple to learn, and it is inexpensive. I remember learning to swim at my local swimming pool when I was a child, and it never felt like a demandingdemanding or challenging experience. Another hobby that I find accessible and enjoyableeasy and fun is photography. In my opinion, anyone can take interesting pictures without extensive technical knowledge of camera operationwithout knowing too much about the technicalities of operating a camera. Despite being straightforward, taking photos is a satisfying activity.
On the other hand, difficult hobbies can sometimes be more exciting. If an activity is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we complete it successfullymanage to do it successfully. For example, film editing is a hobby that requires considerable expertisea high level of knowledge and expertise. In my case, it took me around two years before I became competent at this activity, but now I enjoy it much more than I did when I started. I believe that many hobbies give us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance because our results improvethe results are better and our sense of achievement growsthe feeling of achievement is greater.
In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and relaxing, but difficult hobbies can be equally pleasurable for distinctdifferent reasons.
Why this response received Band 9.0
The response fully answers the question with a clear position, carefully developed contrasting arguments, and concrete personal examples that make the reasoning persuasive. Organisation and language are highly controlled; the main limitation is a rare punctuation lapse and slight repetition of central topic words. The highest priority is simply to proofread sentence boundaries and vary repeated wording where this can be done without sacrificing precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is explicit and fully developed through relevant, well-supported reasons showing why both easy and difficult hobbies can be enjoyable.
Maintain this depth while making the final conclusion state the degree of disagreement as explicitly as the introduction does.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is effortless to follow, with purposeful paragraphing, strong internal progression, and cohesive devices used naturally.
Preserve this clear progression while checking that every sentence boundary supports the smoothest possible reading.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible, precise, and natural across the topic, with only slight repetition of words such as hobby, easy, and difficult.
Introduce occasional accurate synonyms for repeated topic language while retaining the current clarity and restraint.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex structures is handled accurately and naturally, with only a rare sentence-boundary error.
Proofread coordinated independent clauses to avoid comma splices in otherwise highly controlled sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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