Art is essential for people and society but they are often overlooked and poorly funded. Some think that the government should pay for those art projects, and of course, observe precisely how those funds are being spent and on what type of projects it is being used. How far do you agree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Nowadays creative projects have become very expensive and can not generate returns for their creatorsbring pay-off to their authors. Some people think that the government should pay for those projects and, of course, observeand of course, observe precisely how those funds are being spent and on what types of projects they are being usedon what type of projects it is being used. Though I agree with state-funded art projects, I do not agree with strict monitoring of the projects and funds as creative artists should be given full freedom.
To commence with, it is quite obvious that no entity or organisation knows a nation's cultural aspects and needs better than the government. This is why a government can evaluate which sphere of cultural life has the necessity of development. It also achieves its aim of securing public supportgoals of public loyalty by funding a specific field of Art and by controlling the budget by giving maintenance only to projects they are interested in.
However, selective funding of artfunding Art selectively can lead artists to lack freedom in expressing themselves. In other words,In other words, then those in powerthose who have power will use the money to regulate cultural life. As a consequence, this control can limit artistic imaginationit can then limit the imagination and confine artists within boundariesput artists into borders they would be scared to cross. This can result in censorshipThus, here comes censorship, which has incompatible withnothing in common with the main democratic principles. For example, a similar situation emerged in some countries, where the government funded and fully controlled Art projects and therefore the only career artists could pursue is praising the political party with their creations. This shows how artworks can become political works when they are very strictly controlled.
As an alternative to letting a government control Art projects, a non-governmental independent organisation could be established and given responsibility for selecting and fundinggiven the charge to select, and fund creative art projects. It must consist of leading cultural figures in the countrythe best cultural activists from a country. This would guarantee that there are no restrictions on art or artistsno limits for the arts and artists and that the budget is properly utilised.
To conclude, I believe that funding Art is one of the main tasks of a state, but the purpose of such fundingthe purpose of it should be the development and enhancement of the arts, not to make it servenot making it serve the government's political needs. Therefore, the government should fund Art projects while also ensuring creative freedom for the artists.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response’s strongest feature is its nuanced and consistent position: public funding is supported, while strict political control is rejected in favour of independent oversight. Its main limitation is that some supporting claims are expressed through awkward or imprecise phrasing, which occasionally blurs otherwise thoughtful reasoning. The highest-priority improvement is to refine collocations and sentence construction while making the case for government funding as fully developed as the censorship argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly addresses both funding and oversight, sustains a nuanced position, and supports it with a relevant censorship example and an alternative model.
Develop the positive case for government funding with the same depth given to the risks of political control.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically organised, with clear movement from government responsibility to censorship risks, independent oversight, and a consistent conclusion.
Make the relationship between selective funding, budget monitoring, and political control more explicit so the middle of the argument progresses more precisely.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of abstract and topic-specific vocabulary, though several awkward collocations reduce naturalness and precision.
Replace phrases such as giving maintenance, put artists into borders, and given the charge with idiomatic academic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used successfully, but some article, agreement, reference, and construction errors remain noticeable.
Edit long sentences for cleaner clause relationships and accurate reference, particularly where singular and plural nouns or pronouns interact.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Art is essential for people and society but they are often overlooked and poorly funded. Some think that the government should pay for those art projects, and of course, observe precisely how those funds are being spent and on what type of projects it is being used. How far do you agree with this opinion?
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