Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Sample Response
Brain drain is a much-debated issue and many people believe that developed countries should not provide work for skilled professionals from developing or poor nations since they are better utilised in their home countriesin the homeland. I personally believe that this system should be stopped as it would make poor countries poorer while rich countries would be richer in the long runin long run. First, poor countries can produce only a handful of talented peoplea handful number of talented people each year through their broken economic and educational systemssystem. The government and public money are spent to support those students and professionals and when they are ready to serve the country, rich nations actually hijack them. This is quite unethical and a majority of the migrated professionals serve the migrated countries than the countries they were born. This system allows the developed countries to have a large number of talented professionals, scientists, writers, engineers, doctors and so on while poor countries suffer from the scarcity of such experts. These talented and qualified people are key to the developmentthe keys to the development of a poor country and they should serve their motherland. Second, a developed country already has a large number of skilled workerslabours and expert workers and they can do quite well without attractingalluring skilled professionals to come and work there. For instance, the number of native astronomers and scientists in the United States is already huge and they could easily do without recruiting talented and skilled professionalsbrain draining talented and skilled professionals from other countries. Rich countries have a natural obligation to actually send their proficient workers to work and train citizens of poor nations for the betterment of the world. Employing skilled labours from other countries is actually a practice that ruins the balance of global developmentequilibrium of development in the world. Finally, many skilled labours that migrate to developed countriesthe first world countries often end up working in a sector that is unrelated toa sector which is simply irrelevant to their education and skillsskill and hence is a wastage of talent and time. For instance, many doctors and engineers in first world countries actually work in a restaurant or drive a cab only because they migratedthey were migrated from poor countries and failed to demonstrate their professional competenceshow their worthiness. They could have better servedserve the humanity by working in their original professionsbeing enrolled in their original professions in their homelands.
In conclusion, the better lifestyle and more money are the reasons skilled workerslabours migrate to rich countries and this brain drain system should be stopped for the overall betterment of the world.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its firm position supported by several relevant reasons about investment, expertise shortages, and wasted talent. Its main limitation is uneven language control: recurrent word-choice, plural, article, and verb-form problems make some claims sound imprecise despite remaining understandable. The highest-priority improvement is to present the arguments in clearly separated paragraphs while editing recurring phrases about skilled workers and migration for grammatical and collocational accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response clearly agrees with the statement and develops several relevant reasons with examples, though some assertions are broad or insufficiently qualified.
Strengthen the argument by qualifying sweeping claims and explaining more precisely why restricting recruitment would produce the stated benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognizable sequence and uses clear signposting, but multiple main ideas are compressed into one very long body paragraph.
Separate the investment, domestic capacity, and underemployment arguments into distinct paragraphs with clearer internal topic development.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates a good range of topic vocabulary, but recurrent awkward collocations and word forms reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace inaccurate expressions such as “skilled labours,” “migrated professionals,” and “brain draining” with natural worker- and migration-related terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the argument clearly, although article, agreement, comparison, and verb-form errors recur.
Prioritize editing plural count nouns and verb phrases, especially forms such as “labourers,” “serve humanity,” and “could have served.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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