We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.
Sample Response
A large number of people spend most of their time at work. Our liveslife is divided into three equal parts: eight hours for sleep, eight hours for work, and eight hours for family time8 hours - sleep, 8 hours - work, 8 hours - family time. So, in most casesin the most cases, one's co-worker plays an important role in one's life. InFrom my opinion, the essential characteristics of a co-worker are the following. First of all, a person who works closely with me must enjoy their jobmust like his job. I think it is very important for a person to feel satisfied with their jobfeel satisfaction with his job. My husband is a software developer. He is fond of his job and people enjoy working with him because they see how muchmany energy he puts into his job. SecondlySecond of all, my co-worker must be persistent and never give up. I like it whenI like when people who comecame across a problem try to solve it, find a good solutiondecision instead of looking for someone else to hand it over tolooking for another person to hand it over. Another important qualityAnother important aspect of this is that a good worker should always ask himself "What can be improved?" and suggestsuggests new solutions. In addition, he must be a good team player. In the modern world,In the modern world good communication skills and the ability to work in a team are among the common jobposition requirements. Personally, I think it is great to help each other, share new ideas, develop new solutions, etc. It helps to create a team spirit and improve labor productivity. Finally, my co-worker must be punctual. He or she should finish the job on time I think that It is unacceptable to make the rest of a team wait while a person finishes his or her job. Also, my "ideal co-worker" should always be ready to offer his or her help and be supportive. To summarize, I think if a co-worker possesses all of these qualitiesqualities mentioned above he can make workingwork with him really enjoyable and productive.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response addresses the question directly and offers a clear range of relevant qualities, with the example about enthusiasm at work providing useful support. Development is uneven, however, and the single-block presentation plus recurring collocation and sentence-control errors reduce precision and readability. The highest priority is to organize each main quality into a focused paragraph and develop it with a specific, clearly explained workplace example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear set of relevant coworker qualities and supports several of them with reasons or an example.
Develop the later qualities as fully as the first one by adding a specific workplace situation and explaining its impact.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of qualities is easy to follow, but the transitions are formulaic and the response is presented as one long paragraph.
Group related qualities into distinct body paragraphs and use referencing and logical links within each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for the topic and includes some useful workplace language, though several word choices and collocations are inaccurate.
Replace awkward combinations with natural expressions such as job satisfaction, much energy, and reach a good solution.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the ideas clearly, although agreement, article, punctuation, and clause-control errors recur.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries, especially where several ideas are joined together.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.
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