Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before: it means putting old ideas together in new ways. What is your opinion on that?
Sample Response
The last two decadesLast two decades surprisingly changed our lifestyles with technological improvements and the adventwith technological improvements and advent of new devices such as smartphones, smart watches and 3D supporting smart televisions. But, unfortunately, successsuccession rate is minimum if we count failedabortive inventions too. This essay is going to examine what genuine idea is and how it needs to be createdhow should it needed to be created to become successful by today’s standardssuccessive in today's standards. First of all, it is obvious that one of the most important flagship mobile electronic devicesflagships for mobile electronics device is "iPhone". This idea has sold millions around the world but the main thing behind its success is the ancestor of this phone which is "iPod". Although the first phone had so many problems, because it could do everything an iPod could dobecause of its capability of anything iPod can do and also function as a phonephone usage as a plus. This idea could not end up with success without previous trials of iPod project. Secondly, smart watches have recently become prevalentrecently smart watches become prevalent and main idea why they become popular is because of its stylish appearanceopulent look, ability to interact with other devices and timekeeping functionclock ability. For example, smart watches could not be popular if we still need to use the regular watch for time management. Moreover, smart televisions with 3D support could not get much attention if it only supported 3D movies. Gladly, investors figured out that it is important to support what traditional televisions are capable ofwhat traditional televisions capable and as a result of this, many people becamebecome accustomed to these devices. On the other hand, many inventions vanished because of their lack of compatibility with our life, even though they were capable of great things. For example, one of the abortive ideas was to create a new kind of smartphonenew kind of smartphone which works as a personal computer. The idea was called "Ubuntu"called as "Ubuntu" and they created products but due to the fact that many people already have a computer and happy with their smartphones, they didn't want to spend their savings on this device and as a result of this genuine device production halted.
In conclusion, mixing previous ideas improves the probability of creating genuine products and its success rather than trying to create a completely new product.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a relevant position and supports it with several recognisable technology examples, showing how existing features can be recombined successfully. However, the discussion remains narrow and list-like, and frequent sentence-control and word-choice problems weaken clarity. State the opinion directly at the outset, then organise two broader, fully developed arguments in shorter, accurately structured sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay presents a relevant opinion that successful originality often combines existing ideas, and it supports this with technology examples. However, the response is narrow, focuses almost entirely on consumer devices, and does not directly explore the statement in a broader way.
State the opinion clearly in the introduction and use two developed arguments: one explaining why recombination creates originality and one acknowledging when entirely new thinking still matters.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from iPhone to smart watches to smart televisions and failed inventions. Some sentences are fragments, and paragraphing is limited, so the logic can feel list-like.
Use separate paragraphs for successful recombination and failed inventions, with topic sentences that explicitly connect each example to originality.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses some relevant technology vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate word choices reduce precision, including "succession rate", "abortive inventions", "successive" and "flagships".
Use standard innovation vocabulary: "success rate", "failed inventions", "successful", "consumer devices", "combine features" and "market adoption".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are many errors in tense, articles, clause control and sentence boundaries. Several long sentences contain missing verbs or fragments, which affects clarity.
Rewrite long example sentences into shorter subject-verb-object structures before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before: it means putting old ideas together in new ways. What is your opinion on that?
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