Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
Sample Response
People have different views about whether children should learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. I believe starting earlyan early start would be far more beneficial than a later one.
Firstly, teaching children from an early agefrom the start has a lasting impact and will shape their behaviour in public and private life. They become confident in making decisionstaking deciduous. Punishment is necessary in some situations whenfor some kinds of situations where children do not listen to parents and teachers. But those punishments should not be any physical beating a boy or girl is in no way should be used as there are far better ways of punishing a child for teaching him or her something. It should be like education from that also they should learn. Physical punishment is no longer used in most countries and can be found in small countries.
In my opinion, this form of punishment should not be used. A more effective punishmentMore effective punishment could be not to allow childrenhim or them to play with their favourite toyshis favourite toy or to withhold their favourite chocolatenot to allow his or her favourite chocolate for one or two days. Sometimes if you have a very friendly relationship with their childrenyour kids, if theyyou stop talking to them for some time, they realize their mistake and promise not to repeat itmake a promise not to make a mistake again. Teachers and parentsThe teacher and parents should remember that the primary purpose of punishmentthe punishment’s primary purpose is to teach the child not to hurt othersnot to hurt.
To conclude, punishment is necessary to teach children good manners and& distinguish right from wrongdistinguish good things from bad ones as early as possible.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response gives a clear preference for early moral education and offers several relevant examples of non-physical punishment. Its main limitation is that the position on punishment is initially indirect and the supporting ideas are sometimes unclear or weakly developed because of persistent language errors. The highest priority is to state the precise position in the introduction and explain each recommended consequence clearly and specifically.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both the value of early moral education and acceptable punishments, but its position and supporting explanations are unevenly developed.
State a direct position on the necessity of punishment in the introduction and fully explain why each proposed non-physical consequence teaches better behaviour.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is generally logical, although progression within paragraphs is weakened by abrupt statements, faulty referencing, and loosely connected ideas.
Give each body paragraph one clear controlling idea and connect its explanation and example with precise referencing.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for discussing discipline and behaviour, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations reduce precision and occasionally obscure meaning.
Prioritise accurate common expressions such as make decisions, physical punishment, and withdraw privileges instead of forcing less familiar wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in sentence construction, agreement, pronouns, and articles sometimes impede understanding.
Use shorter, complete sentences and check each one for a clear subject-verb structure, consistent pronouns, and correct article use.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
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