Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Nowadays, people debate whetherpeople are arguing whether an ideal lifestyle should be a stable one or whether it should includeor should it include a wide rangeranges of changes. In my opinion, whether changes are needed -- should be determined -- the stages of lives you are at.
In many casesApparently, changesalternations in life are beneficialfavorable to the development of young people, with regard toin regards to their careers. Primarily, an abundant experience in varieties of jobs enables the young to master a broad range of techniques and skills, leading to -- significant edge over the counterparts in the competition for employment. Meanwhile, trying various roles in life and work provides -- wide selections of lifestyles for the young in the future. Only after this comparison can they realize which goals they should pursue in lifewhat the real goals of their lives should be striven for.
However, rather than frequent changeother than frequent changes, the elderly who have undergone all these challenges may pursue a steady lifestyle. For older peopleFor the elders, concentratingconcentration on their favorite activities would give rise to a sense of enjoyment and security, which is beneficialhelpful to physical and psychological health. With a stable lifestyleDue to a stable life, the elderly are less exposed to stress, leading to a decrease in adrenal hormones and resulting in greater well-beingtheir well- beings.
Furthermore, declining mental and physical functioningdegeneration of mental and physical function would make the elderly unlikely to adapt to external changes, causing frustration and depressioncausing frustrations and depressions, which are not contributing to their health.
OverallAbove all, it is unhelpfulunlikely to describe the changes in life as entirely positive or negativewith a positive or negative term. Accommodation for personal needs and goals is more important than the changes themselves.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is strongest in its clear age-based organising principle, which supports a nuanced opinion and gives both perspectives a logical place. Its main limitation is the frequency of inaccurate collocations and grammatical constructions, with some supporting claims also remaining general; the highest-priority improvement is to express the same argument through more natural word combinations and controlled clause structures while adding one concrete example for each side.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer's conditional position is clear, with relevant reasons about career development and later-life stability.
Support each perspective with a concrete, credible example and explain more carefully why age should determine the value of change.
Coherence and Cohesion
The age-based contrast creates clear overall progression, though the short fourth paragraph fragments the discussion of stability and some linking is mechanical.
Combine the two elderly-focused paragraphs and use topic sentences that show how each point develops the central comparison.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonably broad vocabulary, but recurrent miscollocations and word-choice errors reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace combinations such as varieties of jobs, wide selections, and resulting in their well-beings with standard, context-appropriate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main ideas, but errors in articles, agreement, word forms, and clause construction recur.
Prioritise accurate clause patterns after whether and consistent article and singular-plural control before attempting heavily embedded sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
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