Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes.
Sample Response
Housing is perhaps the fastest-growing industryHousing is perhaps fastest growing industry in the world. The frantic growth in the housing industry has resulted in many shortcuts being employed by buildersmany shortcuts employed by builders. Some argue that governments should put in measures to define mechanisms to control quality. while others like to putWhile other like to put the onus on the builders themselves. This essay willwould look into both aspects and conclude by suggesting an idea of fixing the responsibility. History has shown that opportunity to make moneyopportunity of making money plus extreme competition resultsresult in cutting corners in quality in every industry. Same has happened in the housing sector as well. There have been many instances all around the world where poor building quality has led to many deathshas led many deaths. A study by Mumbai University reveals that there are on averageon an average 100 deaths every year in Mumbai alone because of poor construction quality. Therefore, builders cannot be trusted with all the trust people place in themall the faith people have on them. The government should define building codesdefine code for building residences and the minimum acceptable quality. Every project should be scrutinised and evaluated at every stage starting from design to fitting electrical wiring. Approval of construction should be withheld if substandard work is foundany inferiority is found at any stage. By following this method United States government was able to improve housing by a great deal in the 1960s. Now one would find rare accidents at construction sites or after buildingsbuilding are handed over to owners. With above points, it can be concluded that government has a major role to play in enforcing construction rules. Rules should be made to fix responsibility on builders for any lapse.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, logically ordered case for government enforcement, using safety risks and construction examples to keep the discussion relevant and persuasive. The opposing perspective and final division of responsibility remain underdeveloped, while recurring article, plural, and collocation errors reduce polish; clarify from the outset how government and builders should share responsibility, develop both roles, and proofread noun phrases and policy terminology.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear opinion that government should enforce building codes while builders should remain responsible for lapses. It supports this with safety risks and examples, though the discussion of the opposing view is brief and the final responsibility-sharing position could be sharper.
State from the introduction exactly how government and builders should share responsibility, then develop the builder-responsibility side before explaining why government enforcement is essential.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically ordered from problem to evidence to government action and conclusion. Paragraphing is adequate, but some sentence fragments and abrupt transitions reduce smoothness.
Connect each paragraph with a clearer topic sentence, and avoid fragments beginning with "While" unless they are attached to a full main clause.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is relevant to construction, regulation, quality, and enforcement. Some collocations are inaccurate, such as faith on them, define code, and any inferiority, which limits precision.
Use exact policy and construction terms such as "building codes", "inspection", "substandard work", "compliance", and "liability".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses a range of clause structures and is usually easy to understand. Errors with articles, plurals, fragments, and subject-verb agreement occur throughout but rarely block meaning.
Check every noun phrase for articles and plural endings, especially when writing about governments, builders, codes, buildings, and accidents in general.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes.
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