Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
With the invention and widespread use of computers, mobile devices, the internet and other latest technologies people can now access to a range of information very easily. Communication technologyThe communication technology enables them to contact anyone and exchange the information they desire. Though many people consider itconsider it as a major step towardsgreat uplift towards a flexible and advanced era, many people believe that it is a serious threat to usit a serious threat for us. I completely disagree with the idea that the disadvantages and threatsthreat of free information exchange and communication outweigh the advancements it has broughtadvancement it has bought for us. First of all, there are very few people who might misuse easily accessible information and trymight misuse the easily accessible information and can try to do harmharms to others. But consider the vast majority of peoplerest of the mass people who form more than 99.99% of the total population who access informationwould access information to enhance their knowledge, contact people they care aboutcontact with people they care and contribute towards making societymaking the society a better place. Students, research people, teachers, professionals or even kids and mums access a various source of information for their daily needs and blocking their access from the fear of an unknown hacker or terrorist is like locking us at home 24 hours because there might be an accident on the road. In reality, the ability to exchange information and communicate easily has madefacility to exchange information and easy communication made it possible to make the world feel smallershorten the distance of the world. Distance learningThe distance learning, online education, online business, email and websites like Wikipedia have made it possible for someone in a distant village to gain the opportunitygrab the potential to contribute to wider developmentcontribute to a greater enhancement. The sensitive data are always protected by the authority and they spend a huge amount to ensure the data protection and misuse. No matter how lucrative it sounds, hacking a bank’s website and getting information about the customers’ financial statementsstatement is as tough as walking to the middle of an ocean. Whenever we refer to the term modern world its underlying meaning refers technological advancement, information availability and flexibility of communication. Restricting the access and exchange of information for fear of danger is like living in the cave in fear of the earthquake. The technological advancement has made the world a better place to live in, has increased the transparency of government and authority and has enhanced the potential for more advancement and flexibility.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response states a clear disagreement and offers several relevant benefits of open information access, including education, communication and government transparency. Its main limitation is that unsupported figures and absolute claims about misuse and data protection weaken the argument, while the single long paragraph and frequent language errors reduce clarity. Acknowledge genuine risks, support comparisons realistically, and organise two or three developed reasons into separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and several relevant benefits are explained, but exaggerated statistics and dismissive claims leave the dangers insufficiently evaluated.
Concede specific risks such as fraud and privacy breaches, then explain why regulation and digital literacy preserve a net benefit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a broadly understandable sequence, but the entire essay forms one paragraph and repetitive analogies weaken progression.
Use an introduction, separate benefit and risk-response paragraphs, and a concise conclusion that directly restates the extent of disagreement.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a wide range, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as "can access to information," "mass people" and "grab the potential" reduce precision.
Use standard phrases such as "access information," "the vast majority of people," "realise their potential" and "protect data from misuse."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually recoverable, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, word forms, clause boundaries and prepositions affect most sentences.
Shorten sentences and proofread core patterns, including "technology has brought," "people who access" and "data is protected by authorities."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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