What are the reasons for declines of wild animals? What are possible solutions to mitigate this problem?
Sample Response
Animals are an integral part of our eco-system. However, it is irrefutable that wild animal populations are declining rapidlythe percentage of wild animals are reducing rapidly overfrom the last half-century. There are numerous reasonsnumerous of a reason behind it. I will elaborate on these reasonsreason and effective steps which help to protect wildlife.
First and foremost reason behind it is deforestation. Nowadays the human population is increasing day by day so society’s demand exceeds supplyso that the demand for society also rise than supply. as a result of it, people need more accommodation, food, industries, and a better lifestyle in order to fulfill all these desires they cut the natural habitat of animals. Secondly, hunting is also a major cause of the decline in animal populationsa big concern in animals downward trend. Some segments of society killSome segment of society killed the wild animals for their own benefitfor their our benefits Such as, for decorating their house or office, cosmetics, clothes. In other words, Some people use tiger skins in their home interiorsuse tiger skin for an interior of their house, elephant tusks are also usedtusks of elephants also use for import and export to gain profit. Thus, individualsIndividuals put wildlife in danger for their own benefits.
There are some possible solutionsThere is some possible solution to solve this problem. First of all, individuals and the governmentfirst of all, Individual and government should co-operate with each other. To illustrate if anyone saw a wild animal in a living area then they should inform the forest department first instead of beating them. Moreover, the government should enact strict lawssome strict law against hunting or cutting downthe trees. last but not least, everyone should plant more treesmore and more tree to give natural habitat to animals.
To conclude, deforestation and overcrowded areas are among the main reasonsthe overcrowded area is the main reasons for decreasing the wild animals but it is quite important to protect them and this is only possible with the co-operation of society. If they do not save them now, future generationsnew then new generation cannot see them in the future.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is that it addresses both causes and solutions with a clear paragraph structure and generally relevant examples. Its main limitation is the frequent grammatical and word-choice errors, which make several explanations awkward or imprecise even though the central meaning remains understandable. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each proposed solution more specifically while checking subject–verb agreement, noun forms, and collocations throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with relevant causes and solutions, although several points are only briefly or loosely developed.
Explain how each proposed measure would directly reduce habitat loss or hunting, using one precise supporting example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear cause-and-solution structure, but mechanical linking and some poorly controlled sentences weaken the flow within paragraphs.
Use fewer formulaic linkers and connect each claim to its explanation in complete, clearly punctuated sentences.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic adequately, but frequent inaccurate word forms and collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace awkward combinations such as descriptions of animal decline with accurate topic collocations, and check singular and plural noun forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, capitalization, and sentence-structure errors reduce control.
Prioritize subject–verb agreement and complete sentence boundaries, then proofread articles and plural endings systematically.
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What are the reasons for declines of wild animals? What are possible solutions to mitigate this problem?
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