You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - tell him/her when you think you could start
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Jenny and I am 30 years old. I came across your advertisement on Facebook and I would like to joinwould love to be a part of your medical team next season.
I graduated with an M.D. fromgraduated as an M.D from Boston University. I have five years' experiencehave had 5 years of experience working in the medical field. Many of my patients are athletes so I am well equipped with knowledge ofwell-equipped with knowledge regarding sports injuries. I also have stronggreat communication and problem-solving skills which allow me to work and adapt well under great pressure.
I am currently completing my contractfinishing off my contract with Lanshire Hospital and would be available to start my new job on the 1st of March. However, I am aware that the new season will not start until the beginning of April so I am willing to wait if that is the official start date of the position.
Thank you for your consideration. I amThank you for your consideration and I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours sincerely, JennyYours sincerely,
Why this response received Band 8.0
The application is focused, professional, and particularly effective in linking the writer's medical experience and transferable skills to work at a football club. Its main limitation is that it assumes a medical-team role without explicitly confirming the advertised part-time position, while a few expressions are slightly unnatural. The priority is to identify the exact role and part-time availability more directly while retaining the clear supporting detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are addressed with relevant detail and an appropriate formal tone, though the exact part-time role is not clearly identified.
State the position being applied for and confirm the desired part-time arrangement explicitly in the opening.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a clear sequence from introduction to qualifications, availability, and closing, with well-focused paragraphs.
Separate the closing formula from the final sentence and strengthen the transition from professional experience to availability.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of relevant professional vocabulary, although 'graduated as an M.D' and 'under great pressure' are not fully natural collocations.
Prefer idiomatic phrasing such as 'earned my medical degree' and 'work well under pressure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied mix of simple and complex sentences is handled accurately, and errors are rare and non-impeding.
Fine-tune punctuation around longer coordinated sentences and format the complimentary close as a separate line.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- tell him/her when you think you could start
Your response
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