You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - tell him/her when you think you can start
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Benjamin Thomas, an assistant football coach at Manchester City Football Clubat the Manchester City Football Club, interested in joininglooking forward to joining your club as a part-time trainer. In response to a local newspaper advertisement, I am applying asoffering myself as a qualified football coachdeserving and skilled instructor for the post. I have thoroughly read your advert and understand that you need someone to train aspiring young playersyoung and aspiring young people under the supervision of a renowned coachwho are already under the supervision of a renowned coach. I hereby encloseI, hereby, enclose my CVprofessional profile for your kind consideration. From my profile, you will find that under my guidance, the Manchester City Football Club has reached the second-highest ranking in the county league. I have played football throughout my lifeI had been a footballer all my life and led the Manchester Metropolitan University football team for about 4 years during which our team won the inter-university championship twice. I can start right away as my current schedule allows me to have two spare days a week. I look forward to discussing my candidacy for the announced post at your convenience and I am just a phone call away. I hope to meet you soonHope to meet you soon. Yours faithfully, Benjamin Thomas
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses the application purpose with substantial evidence of coaching and playing experience, and its formal tone is generally persuasive. Its main weakness is presentation: all content is compressed into one paragraph, while several phrases sound inflated or unnatural. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the letter by purpose, experience, and availability, then express qualifications in direct professional language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are fully covered, and relevant experience and availability are developed convincingly.
State one or two specific coaching skills more directly instead of relying mainly on achievements to imply suitability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a logical sequence from application to experience, availability, and closing, but the letter lacks paragraph divisions.
Use separate paragraphs for the application purpose, qualifications, and starting arrangements.
Lexical Resource
A broad professional vocabulary supports the application, although some expressions are repetitive or unnatural.
Replace inflated phrases such as offering myself as deserving with concise language such as I wish to apply.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is handled accurately, with only occasional tense and sentence-fragment errors.
Maintain consistent present-perfect tense for continuing experience and write the closing request as a complete sentence.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- tell him/her when you think you can start
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