You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - tell him/her when you think you can start
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my interest in a part-time positionpart-time job position as a staff memberas a team staff at your football club, which you advertised in a local newspaper a couple of days ago. I was born and raised in this town, and I graduated from ACME university a couple of years agoabout a couple of years ago. Having graduated in Economics, I held one full-time job as an Assistant Manager at a local brokerage firm, and a part-time job at a restaurant. But unfortunately, none of these jobs really suited my personalitywent well with my personality. More importantly, I am passionate about footballAnyway, I really enjoy football. In the past, as a university student, I was put in charge of coordinatingput in charge to co-ordinate inter-university tournaments. Besides, I have also taken a course in nutrition and earned a personal training certificationa course in Nutrition and Personal Training certification which would allow me to offer some important nutritional and health tips to the footballers of your club. In addition, I have a very outgoing personalityBy the way, I have a very outgoing personality, and I can start as soon as you ask me to. Therefore, based on my skills and credentials, I surely like to believe that I would be able to render excellent service to your club as a part-time staff memberas a part-time staff. Yours faithfully, Nuwan Joshua
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter addresses every requirement clearly, presenting relevant tournament, nutrition, training, and interpersonal experience and confirming immediate availability. Its strongest feature is the specific evidence of suitability, while the main limitation is professional tone: comments about previous jobs, casual transitions, and several awkward role descriptions weaken the application. Prioritise a concise, positive account of qualifications using natural employment language and clear paragraphing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The applicant is clearly introduced, relevant experience and special skills are developed, and immediate availability is stated, though criticism of previous jobs is unnecessary and slightly unprofessional.
Remove negative comments about earlier employment and connect every background detail directly to suitability for the football-club role.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter progresses logically from application purpose to background, relevant skills, availability, and closing, but limited paragraphing and casual transitions reduce polish.
Use separate paragraphs for introduction, qualifications, and availability, replacing 'Anyway' and 'By the way' with direct topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and relevant to employment, sport, and health, but several role descriptions and collocations sound unnatural.
Use phrases such as 'part-time staff member,' 'coordinated tournaments,' 'nutrition and personal-training qualifications,' and 'contribute effectively.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is generally well controlled, with occasional errors in articles, verb patterns, countability, and phrasing.
Check forms such as 'placed in charge of coordinating' and treat 'staff' as a collective or uncountable noun where appropriate.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- tell him/her when you think you can start
Your response
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