You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - tell him/her when you think you could start
Sample Response
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to enquire about past time vacancy at your football club. I read an advertisement in the ‘Time Express’ about the urgent need for a coach in the YMCA club. So, I would like to apply for it.
I am doing Post-Graduation in physical education at Queens Land University. My degree is about to complete next year. I have been the captain of the football team and played at the state level competitions and won many laurels or prizes.
I have been playing football for the past three years. Currently, I am going training to college students mostly in the evenings. I am quite good at dribbling and can control the ball with ease too. so I have also served as a goal-keeper for my team.
I have a hectic schedule in the morning. So, I would like to render my service preferably in the evenings during weekdays and on Sunday I will be available full time. I would appreciate it if you would give me an opportunity as a part-time coach in your club.
Looking forward to hearing from you in the foreseeable future.
Yours Sincerely,
So this is the end of the GT Writing Task ( You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. )
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct job phrase Original: past time vacancy Suggested revision: a part-time vacancy Why it matters: The correct compound adjective is “part-time,” and the singular noun needs an article.
- 2. Address the right club Original: the YMCA club Suggested revision: your club Why it matters: Referring to “your club” keeps the application consistent with the manager being addressed.
- 3. Fix degree expression Original: doing Post-Graduation Suggested revision: pursuing a postgraduate degree Why it matters: This is the natural grammatical expression for current postgraduate study.
- 4. Use experience verb Original: have been the captain Suggested revision: have served as captain Why it matters: “Served as captain” states the leadership experience more precisely.
- 5. Fix competition phrase Original: played at the state level competitions Suggested revision: competed at state level Why it matters: The revised phrase uses the correct verb and preposition for competitive experience.
- 6. Avoid redundant wording Original: laurels or prizes Suggested revision: awards Why it matters: “Awards” conveys the achievement concisely without presenting near-synonyms as alternatives.
- 7. Fix verb pattern Original: Currently, I am going training to Suggested revision: Currently, I train Why it matters: “Train” takes the students directly as its object in this context.
- 8. Remove redundant adverb Original: with ease too Suggested revision: with ease Why it matters: “Too” is unnecessary because no parallel ability is being added in this clause.
- 9. Fix sentence opening Original: so I have also served Suggested revision: I have also served Why it matters: The lowercase connector after a full stop is incorrect and does not express a clear result.
- 10. Use standard spelling Original: goal-keeper Suggested revision: goalkeeper Why it matters: The standard spelling of this position is one word.
- 11. Use natural wording Original: render my service Suggested revision: work Why it matters: “Work” is clearer and more natural in a job application.
- 12. Fix time preposition Original: during Suggested revision: on Why it matters: Days of the week take the preposition “on” in this availability statement.
Suggested Rewrites
- past time vacancy a part-time vacancy
- the YMCA club your club
- doing Post-Graduation pursuing a postgraduate degree
- have been the captain have served as captain
- played at the state level competitions competed at state level
- laurels or prizes awards
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is easy to follow and gives useful detail about the applicant's football experience, education, skills, and weekly availability. However, it does not clearly state when the applicant could begin work, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken the professional effect; the priority is to answer the start-date point explicitly and edit awkward expressions throughout the letter.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The applicant is introduced and relevant experience and skills are explained, but availability is given without a clear proposed start date.
State an exact or approximate starting time, such as being available to begin next Monday, and remove the commentary after the sign-off.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a broadly logical sequence and uses clear topic-based paragraphs, though some links are mechanical and the final extraneous line disrupts closure.
Use smoother transitions between qualifications, skills, and availability, then end cleanly at the sign-off.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for education and football experience, but inaccurate phrases such as 'past time vacancy,' 'going training,' and 'render my service' recur.
Replace awkward combinations with natural phrases such as 'part-time vacancy,' 'coach college students,' and 'work at the club.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but errors in articles, verb forms, capitalization, and sentence construction are noticeable throughout.
Prioritize accurate verb patterns and clause formation, for example 'my degree will be completed' and 'I currently coach college students.'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- tell him/her when you think you could start
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