You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, Last week I celebrated my 31st birthday at your restaurant and I am writing to express my appreciation regarding the service we were offered. It gives me immense pleasure to thank you all for letting us enjoy the party from the very beginning. The interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was commendable. It uplifted our mood and inspired us to enjoy to the fullest. Besides, all of your staff, right from the welcome guy to the stewardess, were so cordial that we felt a homely appeal. Needless to mention, the party was an excellent memoir to be remembered for a long. The food tasted delicious and they were properly cooked and presented. I was so happy when my friends quoted that they had an excellent dish and ate up to their full stomach. I would not hesitate to recommend your establishment to any food lover. I, take this opportunity to mark this letter as a token of appreciation for the success of the birthday party. However, I would like to mention that you need to enhance the washroom as it is a bit smaller compared to the number of guests you entertain. Thank you once again for everything you have done to make my birthday party a success. Yours faithfully, Prasadarao Talluri
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct the preposition Original: regarding Suggested revision: for Why it matters: The noun “appreciation” takes “for” before its object.
- 2. Credit the restaurant clearly Original: letting us enjoy the party Suggested revision: making the party enjoyable for us Why it matters: The revision states the restaurant’s contribution rather than merely granting permission.
- 3. Fix plural agreement Original: The interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was Suggested revision: The interior and atmosphere of the restaurant were Why it matters: The compound subject requires the plural verb “were.”
- 4. Complete the expression Original: inspired us to enjoy to the fullest Suggested revision: helped us enjoy the evening to the fullest Why it matters: The fixed phrase needs an explicit object for what was enjoyed.
- 5. Use concise possession Original: all of your staff Suggested revision: all your staff Why it matters: “All your staff” is the natural concise form.
- 6. Use a professional role Original: the welcome guy Suggested revision: the host Why it matters: “Welcome guy” is informal and not a standard staff title.
- 7. Use the restaurant role Original: stewardess Suggested revision: servers Why it matters: “Stewardess” is not the appropriate term for restaurant staff.
- 8. Use a natural expression Original: felt a homely appeal Suggested revision: felt at home Why it matters: The original phrase is not idiomatic for a welcoming atmosphere.
- 9. Use a standard transition Original: mention Suggested revision: say Why it matters: “Needless to say” is the established expression.
- 10. Use memory correctly Original: an excellent memoir Suggested revision: a memorable occasion Why it matters: A memoir is a written account, not an event.
- 11. Complete the time phrase Original: to be remembered for a long Suggested revision: that we will remember for a long time Why it matters: The phrase needs “time” and a clear subject.
- 12. Fix pronoun agreement Original: The food tasted delicious and they Suggested revision: The dishes were delicious and they Why it matters: The plural pronoun “they” requires a plural antecedent.
Suggested Rewrites
- regarding for
- letting us enjoy the party making the party enjoyable for us
- The interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was The interior and atmosphere of the restaurant were
- inspired us to enjoy to the fullest helped us enjoy the evening to the fullest
- all of your staff all your staff
- the welcome guy the host
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response warmly thanks the restaurant and covers the atmosphere, staff, food, and a concrete washroom improvement, creating a complete and appropriately appreciative message. Its main limitation is the frequency of unnatural word combinations, which sometimes makes otherwise clear praise sound imprecise. The priority is to preserve the detailed coverage while replacing awkward expressions and dividing the long text into coherent letter paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All required points are fully addressed with specific appreciation and a relevant improvement, while the formal purpose remains clear despite a few overly familiar expressions.
Keep the detailed praise but phrase the washroom suggestion more tactfully and explain the desired improvement with slightly greater precision.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message moves logically from thanks through food, service, and atmosphere to the suggestion, but the absence of visible paragraphing limits readability.
Separate the opening thanks, detailed compliments, improvement request, and closing into distinct paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The letter attempts a broad appreciative vocabulary, but several choices such as “homely appeal,” “excellent memoir,” and “ate up to their full stomach” are not idiomatic.
Prefer natural phrases such as welcoming atmosphere, memorable occasion, and ate until they were satisfied.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Many complex sentences are accurate and easy to follow, but agreement, pronoun reference, and punctuation errors recur in otherwise controlled writing.
Check compound-subject agreement, match pronouns to nouns such as “food,” and remove unnecessary internal commas.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:
- thank the restaurant for the successful evening
- mention the food, service and atmosphere
- suggest improvements that could make things better
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