You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently celebrated my birthday at your restaurant with my friends and that was a grand party. I am writing this letter to thank you for making it a successful and memorable event. My friends and I thoroughly enjoyed the food at your restaurant. The birthday cake was delicious and everyone liked it. Your culinary staff cooked delicious food and inveigled everyone’s taste. The superb menu was provided at a reasonable price. Moreover, the staff was polite and keen to look after our requirements. The service offered was intriguing and beyond our expectations. To add more, the restaurant depicts mother nature’s beauty with glistening greenery all around. The soothing and pleasant atmosphere made the event unique and engaging. However, some improvements would make your restaurant more appealing, I suppose. Firstly, more staff members are essential to serving all the guests. Furthermore, it would be great if you could include a wide variety of foreign cuisines on your menu. I trust you would accept my suggestions. I look forward to seeing the improvements in the restaurant. Once again thank you for a praiseworthy service. Yours faithfully, Vishwa Vinutna
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use simple past Original: I have recently celebrated Suggested revision: I celebrated Why it matters: The specified past time ‘last week’ calls for the simple past tense.
- 2. Use natural celebration wording Original: that was a grand party Suggested revision: it was a wonderful celebration Why it matters: The replacement describes the successful birthday event more naturally.
- 3. Correct word choice Original: inveigled everyone’s taste Suggested revision: delighted everyone’s palate Why it matters: ‘Inveigled’ means persuaded through deception and cannot describe enjoyable food.
- 4. Describe service accurately Original: intriguing Suggested revision: attentive Why it matters: ‘Attentive’ appropriately describes staff service, whereas ‘intriguing’ describes something arousing curiosity.
- 5. Use natural linker Original: To add more Suggested revision: In addition Why it matters: This linker introduces another positive feature more smoothly.
- 6. Capitalise proper name Original: mother nature’s Suggested revision: Mother Nature’s Why it matters: ‘Mother Nature’ is conventionally treated as a proper name and capitalised.
- 7. Correct verb pattern Original: essential to serving Suggested revision: needed to serve Why it matters: This construction clearly states that additional staff are required to serve the guests.
- 8. Soften the request Original: I trust you would accept my suggestions Suggested revision: I hope you will consider my suggestions Why it matters: The revised wording is more courteous when offering improvements to the restaurant.
- 9. Remove incorrect article Original: a praiseworthy service Suggested revision: excellent service Why it matters: ‘Service’ is uncountable in this context, so it should not take the article ‘a’.
- 10. Use natural staff term Original: culinary Suggested revision: kitchen Why it matters: ‘Kitchen staff’ is the usual term for the people who prepare the food.
- 11. Use precise service phrase Original: keen to look after Suggested revision: ready to attend to Why it matters: The replacement describes the staff’s willingness to help more naturally.
- 12. Use natural guest term Original: requirements Suggested revision: needs Why it matters: ‘Needs’ is more natural than ‘requirements’ when describing restaurant guests.
Suggested Rewrites
- I have recently celebrated I celebrated
- that was a grand party it was a wonderful celebration
- inveigled everyone’s taste delighted everyone’s palate
- intriguing attentive
- To add more In addition
- mother nature’s Mother Nature’s
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully addresses the occasion, food, service, atmosphere, and possible improvements, while sustaining a courteous formal tone. Its strongest feature is the relevant detail supporting the writer's appreciation, but cohesion and lexical precision are weakened by a single-block structure, formulaic linking, and several misused words. The main priority is to group related points into paragraphs and replace inflated expressions with natural, exact language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, every bullet point is sufficiently developed, and the appreciative formal tone suits the restaurant audience.
Make each suggested improvement more persuasive by briefly connecting it to a specific aspect of the birthday experience.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from thanks to details and suggestions, but paragraphing is absent and some linking phrases feel mechanical.
Divide the letter into purposeful paragraphs and rely on the logical sequence rather than frequent formulaic connectors.
Lexical Resource
There is good range for describing the event, but inaccurate choices such as inveigled everyone's taste and intriguing service reduce precision.
Use natural collocations such as appealed to everyone's taste, attentive service, and lush surroundings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is handled with generally good accuracy, with only occasional tense, preposition, and punctuation slips.
Review verb patterns and sentence boundaries, especially constructions such as essential for serving and introductory thank-you phrases.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:
- thank the restaurant for the successful evening
- mention the food, service and atmosphere
- suggest improvements that could make things better
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