Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Many people believe that competition is necessary for people's life, but other people claim that cooperation is more important. In my opinion, although competition can encourage people to work harder, cooperation is more valuable for people to improve communicative skills.
On the one hand, competition can encourage several people to work harder. This is becauseThis is because, competition can improve enthusiasm of working to outperform others. For example, a student in competition may work hardermay be work harder to get higher marksmark than his or her classmatestheir classmates. In contrast, without competitors, many students will probably becomeprobably become lazy. Therefore, competition is crucial in people's life.
On the other hand, cooperation can improve many people's communicative skills, because when people cooperate with other people, they need to talk with them. For instance, if students need to complete a group assignment, they have to communicate with their teammates.if students to submit a team work task, they need communicate with their teammate. This process can improvemay be improving students' communicative skills, as they need to process a large amount of spoken informationdeal with many conversation information. Thus, cooperation plays a vitalprimary role not only in people's work and study but also in their daily livesin people's not only working and studying but also in daily life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that cooperation is more significant than competition for many people in the long termin long term, as cooperation can help people to improve communication skillscommunicative skills' level. Even though can encourage several people improve enthusiasm of working, cooperation result in the improvement of communicative skills is even more important in this society.
Why this response received Band 5.5
文章涵盖了讨论双方观点并提出了明确的个人立场，结构层次较清晰。然而，篇幅未达到250字的要求，导致论据拓展较为有限且语言表达重复。建议扩充论点细节以丰富论证，同时重点改进语法准确性和词汇表达的多样性。
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任务回应
文章回应了论题的两个方面并给出了明确的个人观点，但由于字数未达标，论点拓展较为单薄。
在每个论据段落中补充更多维度的原因分析或具体实例，使论证更加充分饱满。
连贯与衔接
文章结构完整，段落分明，段落之间及句子之间具备基本的逻辑连接。
注意避免表达中的连接词错位，并增加更加自然多样的衔接手段。
词汇资源
使用了与话题相关的基本词汇，但词汇量较为有限，且存在多处表达不当和重复用词。
积累并替换高频重复的词组（如表达“提高沟通技巧”），提升词汇搭配的准确性。
语法多样性与准确性
尝试使用了复合句和多种句型，但语法错误较为频繁，涉及动词形式、介词搭配及句式结构。
加强对谓语动词时态、非谓语动词以及让步状语从句完整句式的专项语法练习。
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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