Some people believe that it is a good idea to continue to work at their old age. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sample Response

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As the average lifespan is growing longer across the globe, some people are seeking a rearrangement of their livesrearrangement of lives and consider working at an old age as a good choice. From my perspective, such an ideasuch idea, if put into practice, is harmful to both themselves and the whole society, despite a few benefitsfew benefits it may bring.

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The argument in favor of such proposal is that working outside instead of staying at home to spend decades of retirement gives old people more opportunities to stay linked to mainstream societythe main society, and the labor required in the job also provides a chance for them to keep moving. It is true that people who retire often suffer from social and physical problems such as lonelinesslonliness and bone weakness due to less attachment to the outside world and insufficient physical activities. Therefore, it seems reasonable to some extent that working at an old age is a good choice.

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However, what this idea overlooks is the limited capability of old people and the consequencessubsequence it brings to the job market and the whole society. Although the development of medicine and overall enhancement of education makes old people today much healthier than before, they can still in no way be physically and intellectually paralleled by their younger counterparts. Nevertheless, companies won't ease the workload and reduce working hoursshorten the workload just because the employees are old. As a consequence, doing jobs that are designed for young people's durability can put a great burden on older people's bodiesput a great burden on old people's body, whereby aggravating their health problems that have already accumulated for decades, and far exceeding the possible benefits they can get from physically moving.

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FurthermoreWhat's worse, involving old people in the job market also posespose a great threat to young people and the whole society. Young people usually do not havedon't have much savings and are eager to get a job in order to maintain a basic standard of livingkeep a basic living. With so many older candidatesold competitors in the job market, they will have farmuch fewer job opportunities and lower salaries even if they get one. Hence, such disruption will add to the socioeconomic pressuresurvival stress of the overall society, with graduates unable to pay rent and middle-aged men incapableuncapable of feeding their families.

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In conclusion, considering the disadvantages that outweigh the advantages, it is not a good idea to have people workmake people working at such an old age at which they are supposed to retire and rest.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The essay presents a clear, well-supported position with logical paragraphing and strong overall task coverage. The main limitation lies in occasional word choice and grammatical inaccuracies that slightly diminish the writing's precision. To raise the quality, focus on refining word formation and prepositions while maintaining complex sentence structures.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

The response presents a clear, consistent position throughout, fully addressing the prompt with well-developed supporting arguments.

Next step

Ensure all counterarguments are fully integrated so that the main position remains thoroughly compelling.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used effectively to guide the reader through the argument.

Next step

Vary transitional phrases between paragraphs to create even smoother transitions between supporting points.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of vocabulary is deployed with flexibility, though minor word choice and spelling errors occur.

Next step

Review precise word forms and collocations to eliminate small lexical errors such as inappropriate word choices.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A good variety of complex structures is used with high control, despite occasional minor grammatical slips.

Next step

Proofread carefully for minor errors in article usage, preposition choices, and verb patterns.

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