The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Sample Response
The line graph representsrepresent the number of times Australian teenagers consumed three types of fast food—fast food- pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers between 1975 andto 2000, over 25 years. Overall, fish and chips was the most popular fast food among three which had dropped the popularity over the period whereas, pizza and hamburgers were being popular this time. In 1975, fish and chips was consumed at a high rate ofwas consumed in high rate about 100 times per year. In contrast, pizza and hamburger were consumed at below 10 times a year. Consumption rate of fish and chips fluctuatedwas fluctuated for 10 years between 80 andto 100 times. Then suddenly, the consumption rate was decreased rapidly to approximately 40 times over 15 years. MeanwhileOn the other hand, the consumption rates of pizza and hamburgersconsumption rate of pizza and hamburgers increasedwere increased gradually over this 25-year periodin a similar pattern during this 25 years. Hamburgers were eaten more often than pizzaHamburger was eaten higher than the pizza, 100 and about 85 times per year, respectively100 and 82 times respectively. Pizza consumption remained constant for the last 5 years, while hamburgersyears whereas, hamburgers reached a peak at 100 times, matching the 1975 figure for fish and chipsat 100 times as like fish and chips was.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the three main trends and supports them with several broadly accurate figures, giving the report a clear overall direction. Its main limitation is persistent grammatical and collocational inaccuracy, which makes descriptions awkward even though the meaning remains understandable. The highest-priority improvement is to use controlled comparative sentences with accurate verb forms and prepositions while adding more precise chronological comparison.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report presents a clear overview of all three trends and includes several accurate starting and ending figures, though some important timing and crossover comparisons are omitted.
Add precise comparisons showing when hamburgers overtook fish and chips and when pizza levelled off, while distinguishing the different growth patterns more accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a generally clear chronological progression with useful linking, but the single-paragraph presentation and some awkward connectors weaken organisation.
Separate the introduction and overview from two focused detail paragraphs, grouping the declining series apart from the two rising series.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of graph vocabulary, but recurring inaccurate collocations such as descriptions of popularity, rates, and consumption reduce precision.
Use standard combinations such as 'consumption rose', 'was consumed about 100 times', and 'became more popular' consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms conveys the trends, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, prepositions, passive forms, and clause construction make many sentences awkward.
Practise forming accurate active trend sentences and checking subject-verb agreement before adding more complex comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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