The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
Sample Response
The bar graph depicts the percentage of British peoplerate of British citizens that donated money to charityfunded a charity organisation by age groupbased on age group between 1990 and 2010. Overall, it is apparent that a more significant percentage gave money to charity with the age group of 36-50 years in 1990 and 51- 65 years in 2010. The lowest proportion of British donated to charity with 18 -25 years members in both years.
In more detailIn a more detailed analysis, in 1990, over 40% of people aged 36–50 donated to charityinhabitants gave money to the organisation that consisted of people between the age of 36 – 50 years, which is about 5% greater than the donation rate among 51–65-year-oldspercentage of people who financed age range 51 – 65 years and about 10% more than the rates among 26–35-year-olds and those aged 65+those that donated to age 26 – 35 years and 65 years and above. Moreover, the proportion of 18–25-year-olds donating to charitythe donation proportion to charity with 18 -25 years members was less than half ofwas almost half of the rate for the 36–50 age groupthat of the 36 – 50 years group.
Turning to the 2010 figuresrate, the 51–65 age groupthe age group 51-65 organisation had a donation rate of about 39%received funds from about 40% of the British population, although this was slightlyinsignificantly higher than that of the 36–50 and 65+ age groupsthe age bracket 36 -50 years and 65years and above, which were both 35%. About 6% of 18–25-year-olds donated to charityAbout 5 in 100 people financially supported the age 18 -25 group, which is around one-quarter of the donation rate among 26–35-year-oldsone-fifth of the percentage of citizens that supported charity of 26 -35years people.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides a clear overview and organizes the two years logically, with most headline values and comparisons matching the chart. Its main weakness is the repeated misinterpretation of the age groups as charity organisations or recipients rather than groups of donors, alongside awkward phrasing that reduces precision. The highest-priority improvement is to describe exactly what each percentage represents before reporting and comparing the figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main peaks and lowest group are identified accurately, but the response repeatedly misrepresents donor age groups as charity organisations or recipient groups.
State that each figure is the percentage of people within an age group who donated, then compare the groups on that basis.
Coherence and Cohesion
A clear overview and year-by-year paragraph structure create logical progression, despite some cumbersome referencing within long sentences.
Use shorter comparison sentences with unambiguous references to each age group and year.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for describing proportions and comparisons, but frequent inaccurate collocations make the data relationships imprecise.
Prefer precise phrases such as 'the proportion of donors aged 36–50' and avoid expressions such as 'financed age range.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning, though recurring errors in articles, prepositions, noun phrases, and agreement reduce control.
Edit complex comparison sentences for complete noun phrases, accurate prepositions, and consistent singular-plural agreement.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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