The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Sample Response
The map comparesillustrates the layout of a university caféof university cafe before its redesign and the layout of the café today.current plan for the area.
Overall, it is evident that the cafécafe's underwent several significant changes, including serving area and staff dining rooms with new food and drink facilities and the addition of outdoor seating. However, tables and chairs, toilets, and the kitchen remained unchanged, though the serving area inside was altered.kitchen remained unchanged.
Looking into the details, the original serving area was replaced by a hot meals counter, while a salad bar and barbecue area were introduced along the western wall.details into changes the west side of existing serving area of all food and drink are segmented by three parts such as hot meals, salad bar and barbecue. Similarly, there was a bin on the east sidethere was bin in the east side of the map, which has been replaced by recycling bins in the current layout.and that was redesigned by recycling bins at current period. Furthermore, existing tables and chairs are in the same position at the centre of the cafe.
With regard to the remaining information, the staff dining rooms have been removedstaff dining rooms are removed and replaced by take-away foodtake away food and coffee bar. However, in the past there werewas toilets in the east side of the map, which have remainedthat was stayed at the same place in the present layout.in present time. Finally, outdoor seating has been addedoutdoor seating are added along the southern exterior.for the convenience of the customers.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report effectively highlights the main structural changes shown in the cafe plans and includes a clear overview. However, grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing frequently obscure precision. The main priority is to improve sentence structure and subject-verb agreement to ensure accurate spatial descriptions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the primary changes across both plans and provides a clear overview of transformed and unchanged features.
Ensure spatial locations, such as the barbecue outside and the salad bar along the west wall, are described with complete accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across paragraphs, though some transition signals are used mechanically.
Use more natural linking phrases rather than repetitive formulaic expressions like 'With regard to the remaining information'.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of vocabulary is used to describe changes, though word choices are occasionally awkward.
Refine precise prepositional phrases and verb-noun collocations when describing map modifications.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted, but grammatical errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and verb formation occur frequently.
Focus on correcting passive structures and agreement errors, such as 'there were toilets' and 'outdoor seating has been added'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
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