The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012.
Sample Response
The bar chart compares the spending onconsumer spending on six different items in four countries in 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that British consumersBrtish spent the highest amount onfor purchasing these consumer goods in 2012. As the chart showsAs the data presents, in 2012, Spaniards spent exactly 150 thousand poundspound sterling to buy console games, while Belgian and Austrian consumers each spent roughly 145 thousandwhich cost roughly 145 thousand for Belgian and Austrian consumers. Brits spent the highest amount on gaming consoles and it was about 155 thousand poundsover 165 million. For outdoor gaming accessories, British consumers spent slightly more on these itemsEnglish spent slightly more than that whereas Spanish spending was the lowest, at about 143 thousand poundswhen Austrians spending was the least, 140 million. Furthermore, booksBooks cost around 160 thousand pounds for British and Austrian consumersaround 160 million for British and Austrians while it was 15 million less for Belgians. Besides, Toys cost equally to the citizens of Spain and Austria, 157 roughly, Spaniards spending on these items were somewhat close. It is worth noting thatIt is worth noticing that, BritishEnglish consumers disbursed the highest amount on all these consumer goods and their maximum spending was for cameras, 170 thousand pounds170 million pound. Belgian consumers seem like spent the least and their major share of spending went on outdoor game accessories for which they paid 150 million. Finally, toys and cameras cost the highest for the customers in these countries in 2012.
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Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies Britain's overall dominance and includes several useful comparisons, so the main pattern remains clear. However, the reporting is weakened by omitted cosmetics data and multiple incorrect figures or claims, especially the console and outdoor-accessory values, while pounds are repeatedly mislabeled as millions rather than thousands. First verify every value and unit against the chart, then group accurate comparisons by product or country.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trend is identified and several comparisons are relevant, but cosmetics are omitted and multiple product values, rankings, and units are inaccurate.
Check every selected bar and the thousand-pound unit before writing, then include one accurate comparison covering the omitted cosmetics category.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a broadly understandable product-by-product sequence, although linking is sometimes mechanical and all information is compressed into one paragraph.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping related products or country patterns instead of moving through loosely connected statements.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for spending comparisons, but spelling and unnatural choices such as "English" for consumers and "toys cost equally" reduce precision.
Use consistent labels such as "British consumers" and conventional reporting phrases such as "spending was similar" or "spent the most."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms conveys the general meaning, but frequent errors in possessives, agreement, and clause construction reduce control.
Edit each sentence for a complete grammatical structure, especially forms such as "Austrians' spending was" and "Belgian consumers seemed to spend."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012.
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