The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Sample Response
The first line graph outlines how electrical appliance ownership in households in a country changed from 1920 to 2019changed during a century, commencing from 1920. The second chart delineates how it had affected the time spent on household work per week by the citizens in this country.
As a general trend, with increasing household appliance ownershipthe increasing number of electrical devices possessed by families, the time they spent on houseworktheir need for doing housework significantly declined.
As the graph reveals, only 30 percent of households in this country had vacuum cleaners and 40% of householdsfour out of ten families had washing machines in 1920. Refrigerators were rare electrical appliancesa rare electrical appliance at that time. Two decades laterJust after two decades, however, refrigerator ownershippossessions shot up, and about 50–60% of families owned each of the three electrical itemsalmost half of the families owned these three electrical items in their homes. Ownership of all three appliances rose overallMore families started to own such devices and at the beginning of the twenty-first century, all households owned refrigerators and vacuum cleanersalmost all households had fridges and vacuum cleaners. The washing machine was owned by more than 70% of families which slowly but steadily increased till 2019. By 2019At that point, there was hardly any family without a refrigerator or vacuum cleaner.
The second graph also shows thatIt is interesting to note that, with the increasing number of families owning those electrical appliances, the time they spent on household worktheir need for doing household work like preparing meals, cleaning and washing clothes fell substantiallyremarkably diminished. While they used to work for 50 hours a week doing such work in 1920, this figure fellit decreased to 20 hours in 1960 and 10 in 2019.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response clearly identifies the inverse overall trends and supports them with accurate beginning and end figures, while its paragraphing makes the two charts easy to follow. The main limitation is incomplete treatment of intermediate changes, particularly the washing-machine dip and the plateau in housework hours; the highest-priority improvement is to compare those notable fluctuations directly and refine several awkward or grammatically loose expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both charts are addressed with a clear overview and accurate headline values, but notable intermediate patterns receive limited coverage.
Add the washing-machine fall from 70% to 65% and the housework plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing separates the introduction, overview, appliance ownership, and housework trends in a logical progression.
Strengthen comparison within the appliance paragraph by grouping the two items reaching 100% against the fluctuating washing-machine series.
Lexical Resource
The report uses a broad range of trend vocabulary, although phrases such as 'refrigerator possessions' and 'need for doing housework' are awkward.
Use more natural collocations such as 'refrigerator ownership' and 'time spent doing housework'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are frequent and meaning remains clear, though several reference and clause-control errors reduce precision.
Revise mismatched structures such as 'families which increased' and 'they used to work... it decreased' so each pronoun has a clear referent.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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