The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2020.
Sample Response
TheThe yielded bar charts illustrate the percentage of weekly working hoursweek wise hours in the industrial sectorcommercial side in four European countries, namely France, Denmark, Sweden, the UK.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that 31 to 40 working hours30 to 40 hours works had the highest percentage while the lowest proportions varied across the four countrieswhereas, over 50 and 1 to 14 had the least in all given countries.
For France, about 37% of workers worked 1 to 30 hoursnearly a quarter proportion of workers work 1 to 30 hours , whilealthough, the percentage working 31 to 35 hours31 to 35 hours job percentage was 50%was a half. Only 12% less jober did 36 to 40 hours. The 41–45 and 50+ bands were both 10%, while the 46–50 band was 20%Above 41 hours proportion was same as 1 to 14 had except 46 to 50 which had one-fifth percentage. For Denmark, about 25% of workers worked 31 to 35 hours21% of citizens worked 31 to 35 hours while 36 to 40 hours had 70%. The rest of hours workers proportion was the same, its 10%.
For Sweden, only 3% of people did 1 to 14 hours work which rose slightly as hours rose. At the peakWith the zenith, four-fifths of workersfour-fifth percentage of jober had 36 to 40 hours job. 41 to 45 and 46 to 50+ had 22% and 5% respectively.
For the UK, for 1 to 35 hours, the proportion of workers was roughly 10%workers proportion was roughly 10%. It had the same percentage of workers in 36 to 40 hours as France had in 31 to 35. Additionally, 15% was in 41 to 45 while the proportions for both 46–50 and over 50 hours were 20%whereas, for 46 to 50+ proportion remained same.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is strongest when it organizes the figures by country and identifies the dominant 31–40-hour ranges. However, several figures are inaccurate or unclear, especially for France and Sweden, and frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to verify each value against the charts and express comparisons in simple, accurate sentences with correct nouns, articles, and verb forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and coverage of all four countries address the task, but several figures and grouped ranges are inaccurate or ambiguous.
Report each hours band separately where needed, correcting Sweden’s 1–14 and 41–45 figures and France’s 36–40 figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Country-based paragraphing provides a broadly logical progression, although some comparisons and references are difficult to follow.
Use a consistent pattern for each country and connect comparisons with precise references rather than vague phrases such as 'it had'.
Lexical Resource
The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices such as 'jober', 'commercial side', and 'zenith' reduce accuracy.
Prefer standard terms such as 'workers', 'industrial sector', 'proportion', and 'highest figure' throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, punctuation, and clause structure weaken control.
Build complete comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check plural forms and articles systematically.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2020.
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