The bar graph below shows the area of forest logged in Southwest region and the table presents the number of forest-dwelling species in the same region.
Sample Response
The given bar graph shows the total area that was logged in the SouthwestSouthern region in four different years and the table shows the number of mammal, bird, and amphibian speciesmammal, bird and amphibian species in this region. A glance at the illustration reveals that logginglogin activities in the Southern region increased over timeincreased over the time and the number of species declined over the same periodas an effect have decreased. Looking first at the bar chartGetting back to the details, 75 thousand acres of forest were logged75 thousand acres of forest was cut down in 1990 and this figure doubled to 150 thousand acres by 2000it just doubled in 10 years. Finally, in 2010, exactly 225 thousand acres of forest225 thousand acres forest was loggedlogged down and this was more than thrice the logging area in 1990. The table shows that in 1998 there were 13 mammal speciesthere was 13 mammals, 27 birds and 15 amphibian species in the SouthwestSoutheast forests and this number kept on decreasing over the time. In just four years, 2 mammal species disappeared from the forest and in 10 years 6 mammal species disappeared. The worst case was for birds as in 2008 the number of bird species declined to only 11 from the initial figure 27 in 1998. In the case of amphibians, 6 speciesmore than 6 species weregot lost from the forest in just 10 years.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides a clear overview of the opposing trends and supports it with most of the important figures from both visuals. Its accuracy and fluency are weakened by incorrect region names, occasional overstatement of causation, informal word choices, and recurring grammatical errors. The main priority is to report the Southwest data precisely in formal language, separating the logged-area details from the species comparisons and linking the trends cautiously.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately identifies the relationship between increasing logging and declining species numbers and includes most key figures. There are location errors, such as Southern and Southeast instead of Southwest, and some values are described imprecisely.
Keep the strong overview, but use the exact region name and report the species figures without implying causation beyond what the visuals show.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear overview and then moves from logged area to species data. It is mostly coherent, but all details are in one long paragraph and some transitions are mechanical.
Separate the bar chart details from the table details, and use a final comparison sentence linking the trends cautiously.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally adequate, but there are several word-choice errors, including login activities, logged down, and got lost. The report sometimes uses casual language.
Use formal data language such as logging, forest area logged, declined, fell, species numbers, and recorded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is clear, but there are errors with articles, subject-verb agreement, plurals, and passive constructions.
Check plural agreement after there were and use of forest area phrases such as acres of forest were logged.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar graph below shows the area of forest logged in Southwest region and the table presents the number of forest-dwelling species in the same region.
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