The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999.
Sample Response
The given graphs show the graduatesstudents’ enrollment in the Higher CollegesCollege of Technology for the year 1999. As is presented in the graphs, Dubai Women's and Dubai Men's collegesDubai University had the largest numbers of male and female graduateshad the largest number of male and female enrolled in 1999 and the majority of those studentsmajority of those students received certificates rather than other qualificationsachieved their certificates than other degrees. According to the graphs, more women graduatedmore women got enrolled in the Higher College of Technology and college totals range from about 100 to 547the number ranges from 100 to almost 600. Among the enrolled students, the number of females was higher than the number of malesthe number of females was more than the male. Male graduate data is shown for certificate, diploma, and higher diploma levelsNo data for the male graduate was given and for higher diploma and certificate courses, women outnumbered menwomen exceeded the number of males. According to the pie chart, half of the graduates received certificateshalf of the enrolled for certification courses while 27% had been in diplomaDiploma courses. 20% of the total students got enrolled in higher diploma while only 3% got enrolled in bachelor'sbachelor degree. In summary, the number of diploma and certificate students was significantly more than the number of bachelor degree students in Higher College of Technology and female outnumbered malessuperseded the male in terms of their number on those courses.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies several broad trends, including the dominance of certificate awards and the generally higher number of female graduates, and it provides a recognizable overview. Its effectiveness is reduced by mislabelling graduates as enrolments, incorrectly claiming that male data is absent, and omitting most college-level figures, while frequent language errors weaken clarity. Prioritize accurate use of the chart labels and organize key comparisons by college, qualification level, and gender, supported by carefully selected figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response captures some broad patterns, such as Dubai having the largest numbers and certificates being the largest award category. However, it repeatedly calls the data enrolment rather than graduates, states incorrectly that no male data is given, and omits many key college figures.
Use the visual labels accurately: describe HCT graduates by college, level, and gender, and report key figures such as Dubai Women at 547 and certificate graduates at 50%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a basic introduction, overview, and summary, but ideas are compressed into one main paragraph and progression is sometimes unclear.
Separate details by chart: college totals, levels by gender, and total percentages.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is understandable but repetitive and sometimes inaccurate, especially "enrolled" and "superseded".
Use "graduates", "accounted for", "outnumbered", and "awards" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent errors with articles, comparison structures, and missing words, but the main message is usually understandable.
Edit each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and object before adding comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999.
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