The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
Sample Response
The pie charts compare the proportionratio of holidaymakers from a region who used different types of lodging in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Overall, the hotel became the primary type of accommodation for the majority of the travellers in 1985 and 2005 despite most of the people’s preference to stay with a friend or relative. In 1965According to the illustration, more than half of the holidaymakers from a region stayed in with friends or relativesa house owned by a friend or relative in 1965. This proportionratio declined over timeover the time and dropped to 35% and 30%, respectively35 and 30 percent in 1985 and 2005. A hotel was a preferred accommodation for 16% of these travellers and with time more holidaymakers started to live in a hotel. In 20052000, more than one-third of visitorsone-third visitors stayed in a hotel. CampingCamping while enjoying holidays was chosen by 15% of people15% people in 1965 and after two decades it was preferred by 18% of holidaymakers18% holiday seekers. The popularity of camping seems like decreased in 2005. Finally, 14% visitors picked a caravan for accommodationas an accommodation in 1965 and their ratio decreased to 10% over two decadesin 2 decades before doubling to 20% in 2005but doubled in 2000.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the broad shift from staying with friends or relatives towards hotels and reports most category values with reasonable clarity. Its main limitation is data accuracy: two references use 2000 instead of 2005, and the overview contradicts itself about the dominant accommodation. The priority is to verify every year and percentage against the charts and state one unambiguous overview of the main changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all four accommodation types and identifies several main trends, but inaccurate years and a contradictory overview weaken the account.
Check every date and figure against the charts and state clearly that hotels became the largest category in 1985 and 2005.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from the overview through the accommodation categories in a generally clear sequence, although some links between ideas are awkward.
Group the declining and rising categories into separate body paragraphs and use clearer comparison links between them.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for describing proportions and change, but several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use standard data-reporting phrases such as stayed in hotels, the proportion fell, and caravan use doubled.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms communicates the main meaning, but article, preposition, plural, and verb-form errors recur.
Proofread noun phrases and verb patterns, especially forms such as 15% of people and appears to have decreased.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
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