The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Sample Response
The graphs present data from a surveyreveal data of a survey that shows how Londoners feel about living in London by expressing the best and worst thingsgreatest and worst thing they face. The data also presents the percentage of respondentsratio of these people who think litter, air quality and noise are some primary concerns. Generally speaking, range of shopsfreedom of shopping, employment and multicultural environment are the best things about London while costs, crime and mixture of peopleraces are the main drawbacks of lifemain hindrance of quality life in London, according to the survey takers. The bar graphs consider people’s opinion in three years regarding the best and worst aspectsparamount and poorest aspect of living in London. As is presented, the highest percentages of Londoners, roughly 42-45 percent, think that the range of shopping is the best thing they enjoy about London. Around 35% of Londoners35% Londoners voted for job and the mixture of peoplecross-cultural citizens as main advantages. Night life, places to visit and transport facilities were picked by approximately 20-25% people in these years as the main attraction for dwelling in London. Living and housing costs, traffic jam and crime were picked by a significant percentage of people as the worstvilest thing about this city. Interestingly, while some people consider multicultural environment and transports as two main benefits of living in London, more than one third possess an opposite view. Crime was a great problem in the first year but over the time, a smaller percentagefewer percentage of people showed their concern about it. Finally, littergarbage problem was mentioned by the highest ratio of people, 70-75% as a great concern in London while around 65% and 55% on an average considered air quality and noise to be a major problem for living in London.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report covers all three visuals and selects many of the survey’s most important features, moving logically from advantages to drawbacks and major problems. Its clarity is weakened by imprecise category labels, limited year-by-year comparison, a dense single paragraph, and several unnatural or grammatically faulty expressions. The priority is to organize the three sections separately and compare annual changes using the charts’ exact labels and neutral survey language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all three visuals and identifies many important features, including shops, jobs, cost of living, traffic, crime, litter, air quality, and noise. Some labels are inaccurate or informal, and the report does not always distinguish clearly between the three years.
Use the exact chart categories and add clearer year-by-year comparisons, especially the fall in crime as a worst feature and the decline in noise as a major problem.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear overview and moves from best features to worst features and then major problems. However, the long paragraph and dense listing reduce readability.
Split the report into separate paragraphs for best things, worst things, and major problems.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is fairly wide, but several choices are unnatural or too informal, such as vilest thing, garbage problem, and cross-cultural citizens.
Use neutral survey language: respondents, category, feature, drawback, litter, and percentage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most ideas are understandable, but there are errors with articles, plural nouns, and noun phrases such as 35% Londoners and fewer percentage.
Use of after percentages and revise phrases like a smaller percentage of people.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
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