The tables give information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May 2007
Sample Response
The tables compare data regarding the temperatures and daylight hours in Mumbai and Moscow, during the same week in May 2007May, 2017.
Overall, it can be seen that Mumbai was significantly hotter than Moscow; however, MoscowMumbai was significantly hotter than Moscow, however, Moscow experienced much longer daylight hours.
Regarding the temperatures of the two cities, Mumbai had consistently high temperatures, with daily highs ranging from 33°C to 34°Cranging between 33-34 o C at its peak, and with a daily low of 29°Conly dropping to 29 o C at its low each day. In contrast, the temperature in Moscow was considerably lower, with the daily highs varying from 8°C to 13°Cmaximum varying between 8-13 o C, and the daily lows ranging from 2°C to 9°Cminimum ranging from 2-9 O C. Additionally, while Saturday was the hottest day in Mumbai, Sunday was the hottest day in Moscow.
As for the hours of daylight, the sun rose in Mumbai every day at 6.00 am, and set between 7.05pm and 7.15pm. However, Moscow had considerably longer periods of daylightreceived a lot more daylight hours, with the sun rising between 4.05am and 4.15am each day, and setting at 10pm each of the recorded days. Additionally, Saturday had the longest period of daylightlongest amount of daylight hours in both cities.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is strongest in its clear overview and accurate selection of temperature and daylight comparisons, supported by well-chosen ranges and daily extremes. The main limitation is the incorrect reference to 2017 rather than 2007, alongside a few slightly awkward expressions. The highest-priority improvement is to check task labels and dates carefully so that an otherwise precise report remains fully faithful to the visual.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and supporting details accurately capture the main temperature and daylight contrasts, with the stated year being the only notable factual error.
Verify the task date before writing so the report identifies May 2007 accurately while retaining the strong comparative coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to temperatures and then daylight, with effective paragraphing and clear comparative links.
Refine punctuation around linking adverbs such as “however” to make the already clear progression fully controlled.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and precise for comparing ranges, daily conditions, and daylight, with only occasional slightly awkward phrasing.
Prefer natural formulations such as “daily low” and “duration of daylight” to sharpen collocational precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used accurately, and the few punctuation or phrasing lapses do not impede communication.
Use a semicolon or full stop before sentence adverbs that connect independent clauses, especially “however.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The tables give information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May 2007
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