The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the information regarding the rate of the change in burglary, car theft and robberyin Burglary, car theft, Robbery in New Port Citythe new port city from 2003 to 2012during the year 2003 to 2012. The data has been measured by the number of incidentscalibrated in numbers.
Looking at the overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the car theft crime rate was shared by an upward trend in the given period whereas the least context was shown by Burglary.
Apparently, it is clearit is crystal noticeable that in the initial year, the Burglary rate was reached at the zenith point. Then it fell sharply from 2004 to 2012. MeanwhileApart from it, the crime rate of car theft rosewas rose in the last year. Across the periodAfter that, the robbery rate remained relatively stable for several yearsthe four years of Robbery offence rate almost remained the same, at approximately 500 incidentswhich were approximately 500. In contrast, the car theft rate was higher than the robbery ratehigher than the Robbery.
Turning totowards the remaining data, the rate of Robbery was relatively stable throughout the periodconstant for some years. From 2004 to 2008The 2004to 2008, the burglary rate fell sharplythe crime rate of Burglary were sharply down. Furthermore, it reached 2,200it was reached 2200 in 2012 compared with robberyrather than Robbery.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is divided into recognizable sections and identifies some broad movements, including burglary's sharp decline and robbery's comparatively low level. Its overview and several details are inaccurate or unclear: burglary was not the lowest category, it peaked in 2004, and its 2012 figure was about 1,400 rather than 2,200. The priority is to establish the three correct overall trends, then support each with well-chosen start, peak, low, and end figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response mentions all three crimes and some valid movements, but its overview is inaccurate and several key dates and figures are misstated or omitted.
Give an accurate overview that burglary fell markedly, car theft fluctuated but ended highest, and robbery stayed lowest, then select reliable figures for each trend.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a visible structure, but repetition, vague references, and poorly ordered details weaken progression and make the final paragraph difficult to follow.
Organize one detail paragraph around burglary and another around car theft and robbery, with each sentence moving chronologically through the data.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent misuse of words such as calibrated, context, and zenith makes the description unnatural and sometimes imprecise.
Prefer accurate, conventional graph vocabulary such as peaked, declined sharply, remained stable, fluctuated, and number of incidents.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts both simple and complex sentences, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, passive forms, and sentence construction reduce clarity.
Practise active trend structures such as burglary fell and car theft rose, and check subject-verb agreement and articles in every sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012.
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