The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Sample Response
The chartsdiagram illustrates the proportion of three types of nutrients in typical meals, which can be unhealthy if consumed too much. 'Sodium', 'saturated fats' and 'added sugar' are these three nutrientsfood nutrients and the data is taken from the breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks Americans eat. Generally speaking, Americans eat less sodium, saturated fats and sugar at breakfastduring their breakfast but they consume a large proportion of them while they eat their lunch and dinner. The snacks also contain these nutrients in high proportionsin plenty. The first chart shows the average percentage of sodium intake by Americans. Dinner contains the highest proportionratio of sodium (43%) while 29% of it is eaten while having lunch. Breakfast and snacks include an equal proportion of sodium, which is 14% each. The second chart outlines the percentages of saturated fats in meals. At dinnerBy eating dinner, Americans on averageaverage Americans consume 37% of saturated fats, which is the highest among the meal types. Lunch accounts forcontributes to a consumption of 26% saturated fats, followed by snacks with 21% and breakfast with 16%. The last pie chart illustrates the proportion of added sugar in meals. Snacks contain the highest proportion of it, 42%. A typical dinner includes 23% sugar while lunch and breakfast contain 19% and 16% respectively. It is worth noticing that, these three nutrients are less consumed through breakfasts by Americans.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is strongest in its complete and largely accurate reporting of all twelve percentages, with clear identification of the leading meal for each nutrient. Its overview is somewhat imprecise about snacks and the presentation is compressed into one paragraph, while several collocations sound unnatural. Prioritise a sharper overview that contrasts dinner’s dominance in sodium and saturated fat with snacks’ dominance in added sugar, then separate the overview from the detailed comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report accurately covers all values and identifies the main high and low points, although the overview’s broad claim about snacks is imprecise.
Make the overview more selective by contrasting dinner’s lead for sodium and saturated fat with snacks’ lead for added sugar.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically through the three charts with clear referencing, but the single-block presentation and repeated closing observation weaken organisation slightly.
Use a separate overview paragraph and group the detailed comparisons into clearly defined paragraphs without repeating the same low-breakfast point.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently wide range of vocabulary describes proportions and rankings clearly, despite several unnatural combinations such as nutrients being eaten during a meal.
Use more natural data-reporting collocations such as accounts for, is consumed at, and represents the largest share.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally good control, while a few article, preposition, agreement, and punctuation slips remain.
Proofread complex sentences for small errors, especially misplaced commas and awkward prepositional phrasing.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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