The table below gives information about online activities of people in different age groups.
Sample Response
The table provides informationtable data provides information about what people from different age groups do when they are online. Overall, the online activitiesactions of people vary greatly by age groupbased on their age groups and getting online news is the most common online activity of people regardless of their age. As can be seen from the given data, teenagers mostly play online games, do social networking, get news online, download digital contentdownload different contents, purchase products and watch videos. 81% of teenagers play online games81% of teenagers’ activity involves playing online video games while social networking and getting news are their second and thirdgetting news and social networking are their second and third most preferred online activities. Teenagers hardly do product research (only 2%)(2% only) or search for peoplesearch others. Among the people who are over 19 years old and are younger than 40 years old, getting digital news, researching products, social networking and purchasing products are quite common. By contrastOn the contrary, people in their 40s and 50speople over 39 years old and younger than 60 years old most commonly get online newsmostly like to get online news, research products, and purchase products. Downloading digital content is not popular in these age groupsamong the people of this age group. It is interesting that getting online news is a very popular activity among the people of all age groups while downloading is popular among teenagers and people in their 20sthe teenagers only. Older people mostly like to get news, do product research and scarcely download. It is quite obvious that people in their twenties like to watch online videos more than the peoplenetizens of other age groups. Finally, social networking is popular among the younger internet users.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies several genuine age-related patterns and uses a reasonably broad range of comparison language, with accurate observations about teenage gaming, product research and younger users' social networking. However, the central overview incorrectly presents news as the leading activity across all ages and the report supplies too little numerical support, so the priority is to identify the true category leaders and substantiate comparisons with selected figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Several age-related patterns are identified, but the overview is inaccurate because news is not the most common activity in most groups, and adult comparisons lack figures.
State that gaming leads among teens while product research leads most adult groups, then support those trends with selected percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move broadly from teenagers to adult groups and then to cross-age trends, but the single long paragraph and repeated concluding observations weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from two focused detail paragraphs, grouping younger users and older users with clear comparisons.
Lexical Resource
The response shows sufficient range for describing trends, although expressions such as 'download different contents', 'search others' and 'netizens' are awkward or unclear.
Use precise table language such as 'download content', 'search for people' and 'internet users'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is used with generally clear meaning, though some noun phrases, articles and comparative constructions remain awkward.
Edit wordy age-group structures and check agreement and article use in every comparison.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information about online activities of people in different age groups.
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