The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019.
Sample Response
The evolution in the various types of crime in the city of Panama between 2010 and 2019 is rendered by the chart. The data is presented asThe data is calibrated in the number of events per year.
To begin with, inIn 2010, burglary had the highest number of incidentsBurglary was the highest in terms of number with around 3400 events. In the following yearIn a subsequent year, A slight rise to about 3,700 casesA slight rise of about 3800 cases was observed. The burglary figureFurther, The rate of Burglary declinedwas declined drastically to only 1,000 incidents1000 complaints by 2015. Over the following yearThen over a year, a small jump was seen to nearly 1,500was seen nearly to 1500, but in the following years no noticeable change occurredthere was no noticeable change had occurred.
A considerable drop was noticed in the case of car theft from about 2,800 in 2010from well above 2500 in 2010 to just above 2000 in 2013. Over the next six years, The events of car theft increased steadily from slight over 2000 to roughly 2800.
It is a noteworthy point that there had been no difference seen for robbery in a decade over the time; it showed fluctuating behaviour in the pattern of robberies.
Overall, It is evident that there was a significant decline occurredsignificant slip was happened for Burglary, but in the other two cases of offence, no clear shift was seenno clear shift did see and stayed bounded in a particular range. By 2019, car theft becamebecome the most common offencea highly offensive activity.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the dominant trends and supports the burglary and car-theft descriptions with several broadly accurate figures. The weakest area is the treatment of robbery, which is both underdeveloped and described contradictorily, while frequent malformed verb structures make the report less polished. Prioritize a precise overview and fuller comparison of all three series, then simplify sentences to eliminate double passives and faulty verb forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main burglary decline and car-theft recovery are adequately reported, but robbery is barely developed and the claim of no difference conflicts with its fluctuations.
Summarize all three lines accurately, noting that robbery remained the lowest while car theft finished highest and burglary fell substantially overall.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically through the three crime types and ends with an overview, though some paragraphs are uneven and linking is mechanical.
Place the overview immediately after the introduction and combine related trend details into balanced comparison paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of trend vocabulary, but several collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “data is calibrated” and “highly offensive activity.”
Use precise chart language such as “incidents,” “fell sharply,” “remained within a narrow range,” and “was the most common crime.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains generally clear, but frequent errors in capitalization, verb forms, and double-passive constructions reduce grammatical control.
Rewrite clauses such as “was declined” and “there was a significant slip was happened” with one correct finite verb.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019.
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