The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
Sample Response
The diagrams illustrate the life cyclelife cycle process of the silkworm as well as various steps in the production of silk clothin making of silk cloth.
Overall, the life cycle of silkworm has four major stages which begin with eggs and end with cocoon. Similarly, there are four main steps in the production of silk cloth commencing with boiling into the water and ending with dying process. Initially, the life cycle of silkworms starts with eggs laid by mothseggs which are laid by bees on the mulberry leaves. After this stage of the cycle, they hatch into silkworm larvaeit becomes silkworm larva on mulberry leaves. The larvae then produce silk threadIt is then developed into silk thread overwithin 4 to 6 weeks. After the last main stage of the life cycle, the larvae form cocoonsit is transformed into cocoons, which are necessary to make silk clothwhich is necessary to make a silk cloth. In the production of silk clothcloths, selected cocoons are boiled in waterboiled into the water. Unwinding is the second stageUnwinding is in the second process in which 300 to 900 mmm threads are produced. Eventually, the thread is then twistedit is then twisted before being woven into clothwhich is helpful for making waves. Finally, the woven cloththe wave is ready for dyeingdye process in any colour for the final production of silk clothclothes.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognizable overview and follows the general order of both processes, which makes the intended sequence easy to follow. Its main limitation is substantial visual inaccuracy: the moth stage is omitted, bees are wrongly said to lay the eggs, and the silk-production stages, thread length, weaving, and dyeing are misreported. The priority is to verify every labelled stage and measurement against both diagrams before describing them.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the broad topic and some stages, but its overview and details contain major omissions and inaccuracies across both diagrams.
Include every main stage in the correct order and check agents, timings, units, weaving, and dyeing directly against the visuals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The two processes progress in a generally understandable sequence, although the single body paragraph and mechanical links weaken organization.
Use one focused paragraph for each diagram and connect stages with precise sequencing rather than repeated generic transitions.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient process vocabulary to convey the basic account, but inaccurate choices such as “dying,” “waves,” and “boiled into” reduce precision.
Use the exact process terms from the diagrams, especially “dyeing,” “weaving,” “unwind,” and “boiled in water.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and passive structures is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, prepositions, and clause formation limit control.
Practise accurate passive process sentences and check articles, singular-plural agreement, and prepositions in every stage description.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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